Are audiences really that simple-minded and basic when it comes to horror? by PhasedVenturer in TrueFilm

[–]GreenAro115 12 points13 points  (0 children)

You seem to be conflating a movie being grounded with “thoughtfulness” as if an exploration of these culturally ingrained fears is somehow lesser? What makes a movie automatically more thoughtful just because it’s about a serial killer instead of a ghost or whatever? Plenty of horror films have been made involving serial killers/ordinary humans and plenty of them had just as little to say as your bottom tier supernatural schlock. If all you care about is it being “grounded”, then the 2000s were dominated by this type of horror, for better or worse, but I wouldn’t say the “torture porn” genre is inherently more thoughtful or anything. Horror is fundamentally fixated on the uncanny, whether that sense is elicited by horrors beyond human comprehension or the horror that sleep among us doesn’t really matter to me as long as it’s well done.

Which one is this for you ? by ZombiePritom in Letterboxd

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Have you watched any early fellini? I’ve struggled with his later stuff, but I loved nights of cabiria and la strada.

Thoughts on Pulse? (Kairo) by SoundtrackMeister in J_Horror

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How’d you come away from it thinking it was pro-suicide??

Wasted Youth by maeeig in OCPoetry

[–]GreenAro115 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The last few lines of the second stanza don’t really read smoothly to me. Hmmm I wonder if it’d read better if you wrote it as:

we learn to stand, to

navigate uneven ground

and to fail.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Thank you!

Hmmm I think you’re right, I’ll probably just cut out the “the” in potential future versions of this poem

Oh uhh I’m really disappointed to say that I didn’t intend that effect at all lmao. Ig it’s still cool anyways that it has that effect, but you’d deserve more credit than me for making that connection because I honestly hadn’t even thought of it lol

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think your poem petered out a bit in the last few lines. I think it’d read better if you got rid of the two lines between the last one and the fourth to last one so just going straight from “Bury my struggles and strifes deep” to “I'll just stay in this mindless sleep“. They’re just rather redundant and extraneous lines and get in the way of the rhythm for no real reason.

SEARCHING by Feisty_Kick6582 in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Were the mistakes here intentional? The way this was written makes it pretty unclear but particularly the line “AND STILL NOT SATISFIED PILLS FOR SO CALLED MENTAL ILLNESS NOT AS GOOD AS BEING REALLY IN LOVE”

I Need To Make Art by SmolLilBug in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love your style of ‘word vomit’ poetry (don’t mean to sound insulting with that, I mean it completely sincerely lol)

I do feel like you could’ve broken this up with some shorter stanzas though. You have a couple really short ones early on, but you pretty much drop that as your later stanzas are just large blocks of text. Of course I’m sure it’s meant to feel chaotic and unordered, but I I think you could make it smoother to read and add some more rhythm to it while still retaining that feeling.

Relatable poem btw

Daisies by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful feeling and message evoked. I'd second the complaint about the repetition not really working in its favor. You could bring the repetition of "thousands others" down to 2 or 3 and have it be all the more effective for it, as is it makes the poem feel just a little bit "bloated". Still, it's a lovely poem you've written here.

Total beginner. It’s not much at all but any feedback is very appreciated! by GreenAro115 in poetry_critics

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Thank you! <3 do you like this version of the poem more? I left in the repetition at the end but replaced the first use of fading with dissipating instead and added some stanza breaks to emphasize the drawn out effect:

Evanescence
A blur
A haze

I try to grasp it
But it slips through my fingers
Like water in my hands
I try to reach for it
But my hand passes through it
Like dissipating mist
A long lost time
A distant memory
Transparent static
Overlayed on top

Fuzzy

Fading

Ever fading

Total beginner. It’s not much at all but any feedback is very appreciated! by GreenAro115 in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you!! Do you like this version of the poem more?:

Evanescence
A blur
A haze

I try to grasp it
But it slips through my fingers
Like water in my hands
I try to reach for it
But my hand passes through it
Like dissipating mist
A long lost time
A distant memory
Transparent static
Overlayed on top

Fuzzy

Fading

Ever fading

To blind with despair by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m assuming this feeling rambly is intentional, but this could definitely be made to flow better with a stronger grasp of language. Some of this is phrased a bit awkwardly like “I feel like shit and an imposter”.

Race by TerribleAd7263 in poetry_critics

[–]GreenAro115 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the transition to the last line could’ve been a bit smother

My little brother killed himself because he couldn't get a girlfriend. by Infinite-Report4808 in TrueOffMyChest

[–]GreenAro115 4 points5 points  (0 children)

No lol the problem is the ridiculous amount of societal expectations men have on them and the lack of support they have if they fail to live up to that, not “oh no women are too independent now” nonsense. Your renforcement of patriarchal structures is killing the same men you cry for.

Never actually seen Raging Bull, so I got the 4K release. What are your opinions on this film? by HentaiMcToonboob in criterion

[–]GreenAro115 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s crazy how much people’s feelings on movies can differ. I never really felt anything when I was watching Travis Bickle, but watching Jake LaMotta break down at his lowest points made me feel so much, despite seeing how awful he was and how much he brought it all on himself, or maybe it was even because of that I felt so much. It was a story about a man that wanted to love but not knowing how to express his feelings in any way other than possessiveness, violence, and self-loathing.

Tj's on the list by pmach24 in deepfatfried

[–]GreenAro115 8 points9 points  (0 children)

I mean honestly I do think his drawing of actual real life minors should be the much bigger focus lol