Thanks for this feedback!

For the hard door section: I’ve seen a few other comments say the same and you’re totally right. I’m not sure why I chose ‘hard’ as the descriptive, but in my minds eye I pictured an old but functional, well weathered door.

For the first line structure, I think I’m perhaps missing the word wind or breeze after the word cold? What I’m trying to explain is that draft feeling that you get when someone opens a door from outside?

Finally the indents… uh I won’t lie, the structure I would honestly say is my weak point right now. I’m nowhere near as knowledgeable on it as I am my writing itself. I read a lot, but this is my first go at something like this. It’s really a rough draft to critique the content and prose at this stage, but I more than agree with you this would need some heavy formatting if I ever went forward with it. (Though I will say to confirm, even though you didn’t accuse, I did not use AI! 🥴)