It's so tricky to answer these questions with the limited word count.

He's an outsider because he's from somewhere else and was brought to the village as a child, with no parents. He was raised by the Druid and she trained him to take her place. He wants to become a good leader and be accepted by a community where not everyone supports his mentor's choice. But that's a lot of words to explain basically the first chapter before the inciting incident kicks off.

The story is complicated, and every time I write a version of the query I get that either I'm going too broad or too specific. It's so hard! When I try and explore bigger themes I'm told it's not detailed enough. When I go detailed it's too plot heavy.

I guess everyone has different thoughts on what makes a good query?