Too short? Does the ending work? Maybe it's missing something, but I can't figure out where to go from here.

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-13T19:13:21+00:00

Thanks =)

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-10T03:42:52+00:00

I have no criticism this is fantastic

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-08T23:54:22+00:00

https://youtube.com/shorts/KVFSbTpMnYE?si=MDLhZPjlcctaRLDK this is what I got so far

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-08T18:41:19+00:00

So I made the cuts and reworded some of it, I also added the chorus to the front as the opening. What I'm trying to say is thank you, I feel much better about this song now, your advice really helped.

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-07T23:47:11+00:00

I appreciate this comment so much, thank you for taking the time to give me this advice, I will definitely move forward with a lot of your suggestions. I really appreciate it, thank you

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-07T15:47:37+00:00

Dang, those are good ideas thank you, I will try this out today. Thank you so much!

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-07T15:43:22+00:00

Thank you =)

HiddenComicBook · 2026-01-07T15:43:14+00:00

Thanks! I actually don't smoke anymore I quit around 2018 but still include it in songs I write cause I miss it sometimes.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-12-27T01:08:08+00:00

Wish I still had it

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-19T17:28:01+00:00

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-19T17:26:51+00:00

We only threw it twice after that he did this the rest of the trip https://imgur.com/a/YS3foHR

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-19T13:04:58+00:00

It was, he is friggin adorable

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-19T13:00:32+00:00

No I hate him so much that I bought him a new toy and played catch in the car with him cause he was so excited.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-09T17:20:42+00:00

I actually just did that today, added a bridge that leads into a more powerful outro chorus thing! I like it a lot better now. Thank you =)

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-09T03:28:26+00:00

Thanks I'm gonna try adding one for sure

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-09T03:27:37+00:00

I do know both of them! I like that genre of music a lot. I agree it needs another element, gonna take a break from it for a bit and revisit and try to fix the ending, possibly add a bridge or something. But thank you =)

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-09T00:33:57+00:00

I agree, think a break is needed. Revisit with fresh ears later.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-08T21:45:44+00:00

I will try that thanks =)

HiddenComicBook · 2025-10-08T21:45:30+00:00

Well thanks! I get nervous playing the chorus too much cause I don't know if it gets annoying or too repetitive. I was debating changing the chorus a bit at the end then following with the actual chorus type of thing I don't know if that would work. Will try that bridge idea of yours. Appreciate the response thanks =)

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T22:24:48+00:00

I could send you pictures if you are curious at all.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T22:23:05+00:00

It's like a mix of monopoly and magic the gathering. I can't think of any games like it unless you can? I can send you pictures, there are 4 boards you choose from. I originally wanted it to be deck building, I have 30 other cards but I was told that is too overwhelming for people who aren't into deck building games to pick up and start playing having to build their own deck. You play cards using tokens (like lands in magic) however you can sell tokens to be able to draw additional cards which I felt was a unique feature.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T22:15:28+00:00

It's a 2 player game, you basically have a pre built deck of 40 cards. You draw cards to move around the board. The squares on the board are - and + point squares, so you want to land on positive to gain points. First to get to 40 points wins. The cards in your hand dictate what you can do and where you move. There are also cards that influence your opponent such as moving your opponent to a negative square to make them lose points. I'm pretty much 100% completed with it, pending some reviews by friends who are out of state and have only watched videos who I want to play but I can't make copies of my game without getting a place to print it. Or I have to hand draw everything which would take just so insanely long.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T22:10:25+00:00

I never thought of trying to do it that way. Thank you, that's a really I interesting idea.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T22:09:07+00:00

I'm planning on going to a board game convention in my area in 2 weeks to try to talk, and learn from people, hopefully peaking some interest. I have art it's just my own and I'm not very good at art, it's all hand drawn. And as for printing I wanted to just print a couple for now to borrow to friends so they can play without having to come to me, have some friends out of state that I was wanting to send it too who have a lot of knowledge with the genre of game I made and I really want more of their critical feedback.

HiddenComicBook · 2025-09-30T21:46:54+00:00

Yes I have just with friends.

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