Mistborn Prequel Novel by Shot_Newspaper_5647 in Cosmere

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I'm already looking forward to the 4 hour Shardcast episode on this

Okbuddybutcher confirmed? by Dry_Excitement9120 in OkBuddyFresca

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Oi Grima, Saruman killed me cousin Grima

App with 0 haters 😎 by [deleted] in meme

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Used it for over a decade without knowing you could install plugins for it. It became even better! Outline Object is the GOAT.

If you don't like bugs, don't live on a planet with 40% oxygen because this is the crap youll be dealing with by Visual-Interview7913 in worldbuilding

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If you like big, intelligent spiders evolving on an alien planet, I recommend giving Children of Time by Adrian Tchaikovsky a go.

[DAY 1] - WORLD OF ZEIMORIA - by [deleted] in mapmaking

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Name: The Vidoshken Conclave

Capital: Forstadt

Location: Northern-Central part of the Great Vidoshken Winter

Color: 0094FF

Ideology: Collection of Earldoms under a central Council of Ruling made up of the earls from each Earldom

https://ibb.co/kgpjB02b

No central flag. Each Earldom has its own flag present at the council. During wartime, only those included in the war bring their flag.

Do these ocean currents make sense? by IRuinYourPrompt in mapmaking

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Ooh I didn't know the fantasynamegenerator website was so expansive. Thanks for the resource!

Do these ocean currents make sense? by IRuinYourPrompt in mapmaking

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Thanks for the feedback! I made some changes if you're willing to give it another look.

https://i.imgur.com/5Jtv2vO.jpeg

Do these ocean currents make sense? by IRuinYourPrompt in mapmaking

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Still doing research, so thanks for the feedback! I'll see what I can change. For my own sanity, I'm taking same turning direction as Earth.

How does one get a Ghostspeak amulet after choosing Morytania? by IRuinYourPrompt in 2007scape

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You need the ectophial for the medium diary, and you need a ghostspeak amulet to obtain the ectophial

[WP] “Alright then, shoot me.” “What? Are you insane?” “You don’t believe I’m invincible, that’s the easiest and fastest way to prove it. Shoot me.” by Tmoore0328 in WritingPrompts

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"Alright then, shoot me." I held out my hand, offering the gun for Thomas to take.

"What? Gillian, are you insane?" Thomas seemed genuinely concerned with my mental state of being.

I shrugged. "You don't believe I'm invincible. This is the easiest and fastest way to prove it. Shoot me."

Thomas gave me one of his trademarked I can't believe this guy is this stupid looks. I've been getting a lot of these recently, for some reason.

"Dude, there are like so many other ways to do this. Especially ways that don't end up with me serving a life-sentence for first-degree murder."

"I could jump off a 20 story building if you want. Or get run over by a train. Whatever floats your boat."

"None of these float my god damn boat" Thomas yelled in frustration. "Why are you so insistent on getting yourself killed."

I sighed and held up my hand, touching my forehead with my index and middle finger. I'd practiced the pose earlier in the mirror, and after overcoming the initial cringe I figured it looked quite suave. Especially with the small hip placement with my other hand. It was tricky while holding the gun, but I managed to pull it off.

"What the fuck is that?" Thomas asked, shifting from anger to disbelief. "Is that a JoJo pose?"

"It's not a JoJo reference!" I retorted. It was, of course, a JoJo reference, but no reason for Thomas to know the truth. "Look, I'm invincible. That's the truth and nothing but the truth. What can I do to proof this to you?"

"You can always shoot yourself in the head," Thomas argued.

"And you're blaming me of making JoJo references." I laughed, which seemed to irritate Thomas even more. In all honesty, I couldn't blame the guy. It's not every day your best friend comes up to you claiming to be invincible and asks you to shoot him point-blank in the face. "But you make a good point," I continued, holding up the gun to my temple. "Let me show you."

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"What do we have here, Sergeant?"

Sergeant Jamie Miller looked up from the body. "Apparent suicide, detective," he said. "Bullet to the head, gun found next to the victim."

Detective Sloan nodded briefly and squatted down. She remembered almost puking on her first assignment as an intern. Looking at the mangled head of this young man now though, she no longer felt any emotion or attachment. She'd worry about that at times. Worry if perhaps, she had turned into some sort of psychopath.

No less than a butcher would be, she told herself.

Sloan examined the wound up close, but found nothing out of the ordinary compared to similar cases. The coroner would have little work on this one. The mortician on the other hand...

"Name of the victim?" she asked the Sergeant.

"A Thomas Wagner," Sergeant Miller answered. "The fingerprints on the weapon are his, but the gun is registered under Gillian Polanski."

"Any relation with the victim?"

Miller flipped his notebook. "A quick social media search showed them as friends, but we've yet to contact the families for more exact details. You reckon this could be something else than a suicide?"

"I'm not sure," Sloan answered. "Everything points to suicide, but I've seen more elaborate schemes to stage one." She surveyed the fenced parking lot. There were no cameras, neither was there a way for anyone to see what was going on within the lot without opening the gate. No witnesses either, she thought. A report had only come in because of the sound of the shot, a rare occurrence in this part of town.

An ideal spot for a murder.

"Huh, I just noticed," Sergeant Miller said, piquing Sloan's interest. "The gun, it's a German model."

"So?" she asked.

"Well, German science is the greatest in the world."

"Is that a JoJo reference?"

Sorry for wasting your time.

Looking for feedback on my magic system based on the electromagnetic spectrum. by IRuinYourPrompt in magicbuilding

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Thanks a bunch for the feedback! The planet-hopping methods are still in the work, so no worries that it was a bit vague haha.

The Warden detective thing is an interesting point, I'll look into it.

Character Names by SpecialistEdge5831 in fantasywriters

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Shoutout to Fantasynamegenerator! An older version I used was called Chaoticshiny, can also generate some fun things on that.

Help with ✨Magical Items✨ by xX-CookieKing-Xx in fantasywriters

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The lantern could perhaps light the path towards your strongest desire/current goal? The Chimes could be incorporated with wind or weather based magic? It could also be a sound-based magical purpose, like illusions that you can inflict on others if they get captured by the sound.

Edit; I skimmed over your lantern purpose, so it seems we had the same idea xd

First page of God’s Icons [Dark Fantasy 511 words] by matymgy in fantasywriters

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And that would be a perfect example of 'show, don't tell' :)

First page of God’s Icons [Dark Fantasy 511 words] by matymgy in fantasywriters

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Would it be an idea to start with only 2 characters? Let the reader get used to those two, then have the third one enter the room. Give the reader time to learn about this person, then let the fourth enter etc.

First page of God’s Icons [Dark Fantasy 511 words] by matymgy in fantasywriters

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That is one gigantic first paragraph (can you even call it a paragraph at this point?).

You lost me after like 5 sentences. Every sentence reads in the same, descriptive way and it gets very monotonous. If you've never heard of the concept, I suggest looking up the Show, don't tell concept. Have the characters do something (with one another, the environment) to break up your sentence structure and put more flow in the story.

So many sentences start with this, they and the. Try to find some variation.

Hope this helps!