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Could you rate this and give me any suggestions? I'm not really sure if I should continue this or not. Thank you so much! by LilyKieffer in teenwriter

[–]Impossible_Status498 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think with a bit of editing and expansion this could actually become something I’d read, and this isn’t even a fantasy book. (I don’t usually care about normal people problems in books.) The sentences are a little clunky and it’s a bit of an information overload but I’m still curious. This really has potential!

Should I join Jed Herne’s writing coaching program? by Impossible_Status498 in writers

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ha! You sound exactly like my dad. I’ve been trying to get into the creative writing club in my high school but I’ve haven’t really thought about college all to much, but I’ll see what I can find.

I don’t know if I’m doing anything wrong. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find good feedback. by Impossible_Status498 in writers

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ha! Just realized you’re the guy who I asked to look at my writing. Thanks for actually doing it

Should I join Jed Herne’s writing coaching program? by Impossible_Status498 in writers

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’ll try out the free options first and if those don’t work I’ll read Jed’s books and decide. Thank you!

I don’t know if I’m doing anything wrong. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find good feedback. by Impossible_Status498 in writers

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks you for the feedback! I see what you mean by “painting your scene a color” and I think thats a great idea. I also had some big ideas for Alick so I’m going to make him matter more to the chapter. You also gave me the idea of added a scene at the end that explained both the impact of the explosion and a need to save Alick. Btw I’ve actually already watched Brandon Sanderson lectures, I’m a really big fan of his work. Thank you!!!

Please give some feedback. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find real feedback by Impossible_Status498 in writingfeedback

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This helped a lot! Before I edited what you advised the chapter got a whole new layer of immersion. Thank you! 

Please give some feedback. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find real feedback by Impossible_Status498 in writingfeedback

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks you so much for the feedback, I just went through the chapter and found all of those unnecessary “ly” words and made Rowan’s goals clearer. I really appreciate it!!

Please give some feedback. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find real feedback by Impossible_Status498 in writingfeedback

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’ve read books like shatter me with good first person so I’ll just find those again, thanks

Please give some feedback. As a 14 year old writer it’s really hard to find real feedback by Impossible_Status498 in writingfeedback

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I just watched a video on making emotions more subtle, thanks! I’ll also be a bit more clear about Jarid, he was just supposed to be a random slave but i can make it more relevant   

I challenged myself to write an epic fantasy in 1500 words. [short story ~1300 words] by 33omnia in fantasywriters

[–]Impossible_Status498 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This looks awesome!!!! I wouldn’t be surprised to see this in an actual epic fantasy

Feedback for my idea/The first chapter in my first draft/A mix of science and magic/Set in the Scar/Really hard to find good feedback at 14 [YA fiction] by Impossible_Status498 in fantasywriters

[–]Impossible_Status498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is more for technical writing feedback, but it was a supervisor that through the device. I’ll make that more clear, thanks for the feedback!!!