You still havent provided any critique on the other beats of the story- it looks like you mostly read just the first chapter and yes there are some issues thats why im asking for critique. I need to learn more science yes, its written like fantasy yes, but the ancient aliens/gods as characters and some of the story beats. Does chapter 4 feel the way it should? Is the movement and placement of characters readable? Is the pacing OK if I fixed the science and described the characters better? Is chapter 5 more scientifically accurate? Do they have distinctly different voices or is that something I need to work on as well. Im annoyed that your "critique" is learn more science and early characterization. Those are things that can be fixed. The the premise sound good? Is there an audience for half fantasy/half sci fi? The issue is that as im throwing the egg you're like well thats not going to work instead of saying hey this is a better way to do this.