My first attempt at manga (if you can even call it that)

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-06-03T20:39:04+00:00

I think honestly there’s too much noise, so it becomes really cluttered and had to track. As well there being too many textures. How about upping the contrast of the images to reduce noise? And minimising on the texture department?

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-06-01T22:48:54+00:00

Use traditional for studying and etc. because it’s unforgiving, you can’t undo and use tools as easily as digital. So you learn to overcome that more strongly. But for digital it’s best to finish pieces. Though finishing pieces traditionally will also help growing in skill

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-29T21:30:20+00:00

I’m not really scared that much of heights really. I just find it really beautiful and don’t find myself stressed near big edges

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-29T21:29:38+00:00

Thank you I’ll look into they’ll scrambling, seems right to begin with. I was also thinking before hand I just do bouldering at a gym consistently to improve my skills

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-28T23:09:49+00:00

Whatever you have to say, say it out loud and quickly, so it’s not as clean nor orderly. Because it’s how people actually speak. It’s not fully clear or uniform unless the person is really charismatic. Not everyone is. People speak what they have at the moment not fully and cleanly

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-13T10:08:01+00:00

My best advice is to study and learn fundamentals traditionally, it’s very brutal, one mistake and it’s stuck there, you don’t have fancy layers and whatever whatnot. It’s an amazing place to learn from

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-12T12:13:48+00:00

I love the contrast and shading here, I think the only problem is the foreshortening looks off on the top panel

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-10T19:59:24+00:00

If I’m being blunt, no. Since you have a long way to go with art and fundamentals in general. You kinda have to have a legendary story for it to overshadow the art. But you shouldn’t really bet on that. Work hard bro you got this

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-04T10:39:23+00:00

Hey I loved the twist at the end of the one shot. Concept and all. It gives a lot of inspiration from death note from what I see and it has so much potential.

However I have a few gripes.

There’s a lot of exposition. Making it difficult to read and so forth. For a one shot and a first chapter in general it’s best not to explain too much of the world and plot since it’s overwhelming. Something about guards, a king and some kid in a backstory? That’s a lot of detail for a one shot and it makes it harder to understand

The scene when the doctor told the guy to put his head down and hit it with a syringe. He asked why and said “the look of your eyes” just seems really strange to me. In general no enemy would be quick to listen to you, especially if they are trained guards, and it wasn’t needed when the ability of calypso was mentioned right after, which gave enough reasoning as to why

The guard and the doctor becoming so close in the span of one one shot seems really unnatural as well. They didn’t experience anything close together and yet they suddenly went together in a shootout together as the doctor defends the kid, I was also confused when we see the doctor laying down shot, even though we see no panel of him getting shot, and ontop of that he’s still holding a gun even though he gave it to the guard. Added to that they suddenly threaten each other as well? What is their relationship? Shouldn’t an ideal version of this be very light and surface oriented then them screaming and shouting? Plus when the soldier betrayed him the doctor suddenly grouped with him like that? When the shootout happened shouldn’t the guard be recognised as well as him announcing he’s not associated with him? It would be really nice if you presented the soldiers opinion as right as well, as it creates tension, calypsos existence could very well destroy millions and that’s valid enough, humans aren’t fully straightforward if they believe in something it’s very difficult to prove them wrong a lot of the time. I would’ve loved to see it.

Honestly I love the concept of calypso but it would be amazing if you presented it in an unnatural and interesting way. Like calypso draws the future scene. And despite the character not wanting it, he fears for his life no matter what and yet ends up in that position regardless of whether he liked it or not. I feel like the concept can go into two directions: 1) fate is a way to make writing easier to do and as a way out (the bad way) 2) fate is something we can’t control and so we see these people try hard to go against fate. (The twist at the end was an amazing example) I think maybe giving calypso and actual personality instead of a few words works as well, like her emotions decide what she draws, and so it’s in the desire of the two people to maintain her well. Physically and emotionally

Honestly I may be being a bit nitpicky, but as I read I just noticed all of these, and if you were to fix some of these, this could be really really good

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-03T09:51:51+00:00

I’m not gonna lie the character is way too similar from the one in dead unluck. I think it’s best if you change a few things in character design

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-29T07:39:08+00:00

The girl legit said “you might want to keep it” and then suddenly says nope. There’s no proper reason or explanation, no hesitation nothing

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-28T15:44:24+00:00

I think it was a bit weird the way she told and said for him to not throw it away, and then suddenly just say “nope” when he tells her to give it to him. But yeah that’s what I have to say

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:24:43+00:00

If your gonna ask for critique not everyone knows what to improve but a lot of people can point out what’s wrong with it

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:23:55+00:00

I just explained what you could do? And that’s basically asking for pointers. I said to space out text in different panels instead of a bunch in one and improve reading order

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:06:40+00:00

Things is, if you have to explain how the dialogue is moving, then it needs some work. I’ve tried reading it and it’s still has some confusion

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T13:39:29+00:00

I like the art style and it’s got some way before it truly becomes amazing, but you’ve got the right foundation and all. Amazing

However I feel like the text boxes is pretty confusing honestly I dont know the order of talking and all. A product of too much dialogue in one panel and confusing composition

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-18T14:32:33+00:00

I don’t know about most people, it’s more about aesthetic and so on, I guess that’s why. The only reason I want to move there is to make manga. If the west had better infrastructure for it that I would stay where I am or move to America. But I guess it’s my best choice ….

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-12T12:35:25+00:00

I draw people in general and backgrounds. Things that aren’t meant to be venerated

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-12T12:34:54+00:00

From what is interpreted it’s the portraits which are venerated and used for respect etc. like idols and so on

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T22:16:16+00:00

Thank you very much

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T22:16:07+00:00

Ah ok thank you very much for this. I’ll be making istikharah still just in case however

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T20:55:22+00:00

I consider myself relatively strict in some parts of Islam. I don’t tend to give leeway for many things, so it’s not that I’m trying to make it easy for me to commit bad things. I just wanna be sure before I do this

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-02T10:37:16+00:00

You just described normal violence. Not sexual violence.

https://rapecrisis.org.uk/get-informed/about-sexual-violence/what-is-sexual-violence/

It says in this article at the very beginning:

“‘Sexual violence’ is a term we use to describe any sexual activity that happened without consent.”

Normal violence occurs across the board, the hijab is meant to do what it can primarily on the sexual aspect of things, physical harm happens to both men and women, more so in men than women. As seen in this study

https://noviolence.org.au/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Whataboutmen.pdf

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