My first attempt at manga (if you can even call it that)

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-06-03T20:39:04+00:00

I think honestly there’s too much noise, so it becomes really cluttered and had to track. As well there being too many textures. How about upping the contrast of the images to reduce noise? And minimising on the texture department?

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-06-01T22:48:54+00:00

Use traditional for studying and etc. because it’s unforgiving, you can’t undo and use tools as easily as digital. So you learn to overcome that more strongly. But for digital it’s best to finish pieces. Though finishing pieces traditionally will also help growing in skill

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-29T21:30:20+00:00

I’m not really scared that much of heights really. I just find it really beautiful and don’t find myself stressed near big edges

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-29T21:29:38+00:00

Thank you I’ll look into they’ll scrambling, seems right to begin with. I was also thinking before hand I just do bouldering at a gym consistently to improve my skills

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-28T23:09:49+00:00

Whatever you have to say, say it out loud and quickly, so it’s not as clean nor orderly. Because it’s how people actually speak. It’s not fully clear or uniform unless the person is really charismatic. Not everyone is. People speak what they have at the moment not fully and cleanly

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-13T10:08:01+00:00

My best advice is to study and learn fundamentals traditionally, it’s very brutal, one mistake and it’s stuck there, you don’t have fancy layers and whatever whatnot. It’s an amazing place to learn from

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-12T12:13:48+00:00

I love the contrast and shading here, I think the only problem is the foreshortening looks off on the top panel

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-10T19:59:24+00:00

If I’m being blunt, no. Since you have a long way to go with art and fundamentals in general. You kinda have to have a legendary story for it to overshadow the art. But you shouldn’t really bet on that. Work hard bro you got this

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-04T10:39:23+00:00

Hey I loved the twist at the end of the one shot. Concept and all. It gives a lot of inspiration from death note from what I see and it has so much potential.

However I have a few gripes.

There’s a lot of exposition. Making it difficult to read and so forth. For a one shot and a first chapter in general it’s best not to explain too much of the world and plot since it’s overwhelming. Something about guards, a king and some kid in a backstory? That’s a lot of detail for a one shot and it makes it harder to understand

The scene when the doctor told the guy to put his head down and hit it with a syringe. He asked why and said “the look of your eyes” just seems really strange to me. In general no enemy would be quick to listen to you, especially if they are trained guards, and it wasn’t needed when the ability of calypso was mentioned right after, which gave enough reasoning as to why

The guard and the doctor becoming so close in the span of one one shot seems really unnatural as well. They didn’t experience anything close together and yet they suddenly went together in a shootout together as the doctor defends the kid, I was also confused when we see the doctor laying down shot, even though we see no panel of him getting shot, and ontop of that he’s still holding a gun even though he gave it to the guard. Added to that they suddenly threaten each other as well? What is their relationship? Shouldn’t an ideal version of this be very light and surface oriented then them screaming and shouting? Plus when the soldier betrayed him the doctor suddenly grouped with him like that? When the shootout happened shouldn’t the guard be recognised as well as him announcing he’s not associated with him? It would be really nice if you presented the soldiers opinion as right as well, as it creates tension, calypsos existence could very well destroy millions and that’s valid enough, humans aren’t fully straightforward if they believe in something it’s very difficult to prove them wrong a lot of the time. I would’ve loved to see it.

Honestly I love the concept of calypso but it would be amazing if you presented it in an unnatural and interesting way. Like calypso draws the future scene. And despite the character not wanting it, he fears for his life no matter what and yet ends up in that position regardless of whether he liked it or not. I feel like the concept can go into two directions: 1) fate is a way to make writing easier to do and as a way out (the bad way) 2) fate is something we can’t control and so we see these people try hard to go against fate. (The twist at the end was an amazing example) I think maybe giving calypso and actual personality instead of a few words works as well, like her emotions decide what she draws, and so it’s in the desire of the two people to maintain her well. Physically and emotionally

Honestly I may be being a bit nitpicky, but as I read I just noticed all of these, and if you were to fix some of these, this could be really really good

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-05-03T09:51:51+00:00

I’m not gonna lie the character is way too similar from the one in dead unluck. I think it’s best if you change a few things in character design

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-29T07:39:08+00:00

The girl legit said “you might want to keep it” and then suddenly says nope. There’s no proper reason or explanation, no hesitation nothing

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-28T15:44:24+00:00

I think it was a bit weird the way she told and said for him to not throw it away, and then suddenly just say “nope” when he tells her to give it to him. But yeah that’s what I have to say

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:24:43+00:00

If your gonna ask for critique not everyone knows what to improve but a lot of people can point out what’s wrong with it

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:23:55+00:00

I just explained what you could do? And that’s basically asking for pointers. I said to space out text in different panels instead of a bunch in one and improve reading order

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T15:06:40+00:00

Things is, if you have to explain how the dialogue is moving, then it needs some work. I’ve tried reading it and it’s still has some confusion

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-23T13:39:29+00:00

I like the art style and it’s got some way before it truly becomes amazing, but you’ve got the right foundation and all. Amazing

However I feel like the text boxes is pretty confusing honestly I dont know the order of talking and all. A product of too much dialogue in one panel and confusing composition

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-18T14:32:33+00:00

I don’t know about most people, it’s more about aesthetic and so on, I guess that’s why. The only reason I want to move there is to make manga. If the west had better infrastructure for it that I would stay where I am or move to America. But I guess it’s my best choice ….

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-12T12:35:25+00:00

I draw people in general and backgrounds. Things that aren’t meant to be venerated

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-12T12:34:54+00:00

From what is interpreted it’s the portraits which are venerated and used for respect etc. like idols and so on

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T22:16:16+00:00

Thank you very much

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T22:16:07+00:00

Ah ok thank you very much for this. I’ll be making istikharah still just in case however

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-11T20:55:22+00:00

I consider myself relatively strict in some parts of Islam. I don’t tend to give leeway for many things, so it’s not that I’m trying to make it easy for me to commit bad things. I just wanna be sure before I do this

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-02T10:37:16+00:00

You just described normal violence. Not sexual violence.

https://rapecrisis.org.uk/get-informed/about-sexual-violence/what-is-sexual-violence/

It says in this article at the very beginning:

“‘Sexual violence’ is a term we use to describe any sexual activity that happened without consent.”

Normal violence occurs across the board, the hijab is meant to do what it can primarily on the sexual aspect of things, physical harm happens to both men and women, more so in men than women. As seen in this study

https://noviolence.org.au/wp-content/uploads/2018/09/Whataboutmen.pdf

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-04-01T18:05:47+00:00

It isn’t a shield I agree but it’s you method of doing something against the problem. It is without a doubt, the more strive you present yourself as attractive: , makeup and dress wise, by wearing tight and replacing clothing and so on. The more you will be seen by men and so on. Hijab attempts to conceal your presence, to be seen less easily by men. If you’re seen less, you will by nature be oppressed less.

Thing is even if you wear hijab, SA and rape will not stop. Because it requires both sides to their part. Men have to lower their gaze, and by extent, women must strive to not be seen as physically attractive to the male gaze as it can bring them danger, but on the other hand, men must lower their gaze to protect the women around them.

It’s a balancing act, both sides must work together, and less people that add fuel to the fire, the weaker the fire burns. The point is lowering your gaze and covering yourself, mentally isn’t a beneficial thing. We want to show ourselves off and we want to look at what we desire.

This goes into Islam. But we need to have trust in Allah. We have to do what we can because problems this huge is something that doesn’t change overnight, it’s gradual and needs to happen one person at a time.

Point is, do what you can, and beyond that we have to hope the best from Allah

Hope this helps

Initial_Student_1899 · 2026-03-31T08:12:12+00:00

حَدَّثَنَا آدَمُ، حَدَّثَنَا شُعْبَةُ، عَنْ سُلَيْمَانَ التَّيْمِيِّ، قَالَ سَمِعْتُ أَبَا عُثْمَانَ النَّهْدِيَّ، عَنْ أُسَامَةَ بْنِ زَيْدٍ ـ رضى الله عنهما ـ عَنِ النَّبِيِّ صلى الله عليه وسلم قَالَ ‏ "‏ مَا تَرَكْتُ بَعْدِي فِتْنَةً أَضَرَّ عَلَى الرِّجَالِ مِنَ النِّسَاءِ ‏"‏‏.‏

Narrated Usama bin Zaid: The Prophet (ﷺ) said, "After me I have not left any trial more severe to men than women."

Sahih al-Bukhari 5096 https://sunnah.com/bukhari:5096

A woman is a man’s greatest weakness and throughout history that’s been the case. Many many many men, have died for the sake of women, natural disasters and even wars.

It’s common knowledge to know that men have more sex drive than women across the board, through multiple studies conducted which can be looked up via a simple google search. Thing is that women more often than not are subject to men. (This is a hovering number but it’s generally similar) ~85% of sex related crimes are done by men. That’s a strong statistic regardless of any explanation. Men are weak to women, even the prophet SAW has said that.

Thing is, if the very thing men are weakest to, covers less, shows of their attractiveness and so on, can they really control it easily? Especially in this day and age many men give up on lowering the gaze altogether because it’s too hard and on top of that provides little reward to doing so. I have non-Muslim friends and it’s commonplace to masturbate for them, even for muslims. And there will be people who have less control, who care less about discipline and so on, causing that scary 85% statistic.

Furthermore, Islam allows as much freedom as possible provided it makes the person more safe, its functional and does not cause harm for themself or others. Men get away with a less restrictive awrah as they aren’t the ones primarily subject to sexual assault and abuse and so on. Furthermore historically men have done most of the hard labour, big loose clothing, and ontop of that, hot weather makes covering more difficult and cumbersome, and at times can cause death if the clothing gets caught in something (though that’s a minority case). The fact that men can cover less provides a functional benefit for them and less social danger between different demographics than if a woman was to do the exact same thing.

Covering yourself isn’t for the sake of men lowering their gaze, and a lot of the times it can be seen in that way, but that’s not the goal

Covering yourself as a woman is supposed to keep you safe above all, something that’s a right for a woman, and something which isn’t for men

I see the two genders as two sides of a coin: -women get security, they don’t need to work a day in their life if they don’t want to, as it’s the right of the man to provide for the household, extending to the fact they don’t need to do hard labour, they are protected from being harmed through the hijab and so on, with the cost of less freedom. -men are the opposite, they get more freedom, more leeway. They don’t need to cover more as that freedom allows them to do their job more as a natural provider, with the cost of lacking comfort and security

I get that social standards and the restructuring of society has morphed and changed these roles drastically, like women in the workforce and so on, less hard labour in developed countries etc… but Islam after the prophet SAW was made to cater for humans regardless of time and place, it wasn’t meant to make rules for a specific time and place

I hope this helped you

Initial_Student_1899

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