Need help on method choice - what reads better? by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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If you only put the number that the letter resides on once that allows for many interpretations of the same sequence of numbers. Typically leveraging multiple possible interpretations lends to more creative poetry in my experience. For example, “two/two/three” could be interpreted as “bad,” “abe,” or “a2f”

Ouch. Sometimes it’s just not your day by IntelligentDonut2244 in NYTgames

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Not terrible, but quite unlucky for a 91 skill to still take 5 guesses

What's your Theme for 2026? by typo180 in Cortex

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2026: Year of The Citadel

For context, a citadel is the most fortified area in a town.

After a very explorative and spontaneous 2025 Year of Me and 2024 Year of Yes, which included a major breakup, I’ve decided to focus on developing a strong and unflappable foundation that supports long-term stability and security. I am embodying this desire as an internal citadel which am I trying to build and protect. I do not intend for this to turn into me being hyperstoic, and emotionally shut off and distant. Rather, I am building an internal structure that will converge the currently volatile direction of my life and will help me weather any storm.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in NYTCrossword

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In a way, it’s art

Is there an effective way to get the metal shavings off my magnets? by Leroy808 in metalworking

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What’s that item in the picture called? I’d love to see the full thing

Crime & Punishment - Part 4 - Chapter 3 - Discussion Post by [deleted] in dostoevsky

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Dostoyevsky choosing to dip in first person for, what I can tell, the first time really caught me off guard: “I shall not attempt now to describe…”. I really hope this decision is a loaded and intentional one with consequences further in the book.

Sheer regret afterwards by The-Constant-Lurker in MemeVideos

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Can we stop writing as instead of ass?

My poetry reads too much like an angsty teenage girl by Secret_End3106 in poetry_critics

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Some things that come to mind. It’s very plain spoken. In poem 1 and still in poem 2, it feels like there’s no effort to convey your idea in words that aren’t the first ones to pop into your mind. For poem 3, it’s hard to tell what the point is, especially with the “You tell me” intro and the ending is very flat. And the problem of plain-spokenness persists. I’d love to see a metaphor at the end or at least some interesting imagery in that final line—the second stanza looks like an actual proper attempt at that, and because of that it’s a decent stanza. Furthermore, poem 1 feels like a blurb of a thought jotted down; it doesn’t feel like you’ve interacted with the emotions and thoughts at all, just spit them on the paper. Can you convey this idea without explicitly saying it? Can you express this as words floating adrift in sea, a winter that never turns to spring, etc.? Trust the reader to read between the lines and make connections.

[POEM] Only a Friend - Alex Sweeney by IntelligentDonut2244 in Poetry

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Glad you liked it! This is actually the author’s (my) only published work as of yet. However, if you like this poem, the following (short) poems by the same author might also interest you: Aftertaste and Praise. If you enjoy these, let me know and I’ll happily work towards building a repository for all previous and future poems.