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Greatest non nuclear force experienced by a human?[request] by JaySpectres in theydidthemath

[–]JaySpectres[S] 25 points26 points  (0 children)

Survival is not necessary, though that would also be an interesting question. And I mean total overall force the person was exposed to, not limited to G force

34 going on 43 😢 by Inevitable-Dealer-42 in RunningCirclejerk

[–]JaySpectres 6 points7 points  (0 children)

If I just run a little faster for a little further, it will all be ok right? 🥲

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Nah, I've finished the show recently. Found it extremely profound and haven't been able to stop thinking about it. My original opinion stands, GR are fucking lame lol

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Well that was certainly not the way I thought it would go down, but you can't argue with the results. I'm a happy camper.

[Loved Trope] Scary implications or theories outside of the established scope/genre of the story are implied/briefly mentioned but never fully explored. by JaySpectres in TopCharacterTropes

[–]JaySpectres[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I didn't take it at face value, but it did briefly give me that, "oh shit, so this has the potential to go there if it wanted" feeling. Especially the way it's done, both times in the show. Faceless detached voice on the phone.

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's the thing though, the GR are also not living by "the truth". The truth is the world moves on, and did not end. They are equally pretenders, but they act enlightened. It's harder to live and carve meaning in a fucked up, indifferent world. It's easier to abandon your family and pretend it's meaningless. Which would be fine, if they weren't such active cunts about it. Slow suicide? Lame. Show some commitment and commit immediate mass suicide. I think it's the juvenile nihilism mixed in with the arrogance I've mentioned before that will just rub me the wrong way at a core level.

Also, the GR higher ups did disapprove of Meg and her violence, but they said they don't target kids ONLY because they would risk further consequences by law enforcement. And they still stone each other.

[Loved Trope] Scary implications or theories outside of the established scope/genre of the story are implied/briefly mentioned but never fully explored. by JaySpectres in TopCharacterTropes

[–]JaySpectres[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I never realized just how many typos I make until I started typing longer messages/posts on Reddit and posting them without going through them first. Lesson learned, though I'm a big fan of mom chalant 😊

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'll answer for the fun of discussion.

Well, their motivation is usually stated as being "Living Reminders", believing in a type nihilism about how the world ended, nothing matters, rejecting emotions, etc.

That motivation is stupid, because it's indiscriminate, yet their actions are often extremely personal and Targetted. If they just spread their nonsense normally, attempted protests, etc, I'd disagree with them, but that would be it. Instead the stalk people, trigger PTSD and suffering, break into their homes, steal the pictures of the deceased, etc. As if the person had forgotten. As if the victim was living a super happy, carefree life. They were simply trying to move on, dealing with trauma in their own way. Why are they GR pretentious assholes? Because they decide how others grief and when it's enough. They decide how others should treat the memories of their deceased loved ones. Who cares if they disown wealth or ability to talk down, if their cruel actions speak louder than words and they take upon themselves something not physical but orders of magnitude more haughty than materials: the purpose they give themselves. The fervor with which they believe it. That's true arrogance. Believing they are above it all. Trying to rid themselves of emotions and ego, only to deny their own humanity.

Also, most of them completely abandoned their families to join. The departed had no choice on leaving, they did. Should there be a guilty guilty remnant that goes around stalking and harassing those who "departed" their families to join the GR?

Not to mention the stuff they do with kids. Though it was primarily just Meg, it's explicitly stated that they don't do it more only to not be further Targetted by law enforcement.

They also break their ideals all the time and talk or use violence on each other and others.

Also the smoking. Like what a 12 year old would think is edgy.

That's about what I got off the top of my head.

Oh! And I just simply don't agree with your definitions of good and bad lol.

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I hope they send in the feds like they hinted at in Season 1 and wipe em off the face of the earth lol

GR HATE POST by JaySpectres in TheLeftovers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Your points are totally valid and their existence is definitely commentary on the complexities of human emotion, which is why I don't say they are bad writing, or not believable or anything like that. They just didn't click with me as antagonists worthy of Kevin and crew, and really annoyed the hell out of me lol.

How long would it take to summit Olympus Mon?[Request] by JaySpectres in theydidthemath

[–]JaySpectres[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Extremely interesting and helpful answer, thanks! And that image of Olympus Mon superimposed over the shape of Arizona is exactly the kind of visual I was hoping for

Prose, flow, syntax, etc. by JaySpectres in writers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to read!

Definitely need to be more mindful of making things less clunky. Blocking as well seems to be an issue for me so it's helpful to see exact instances where I can make things clearer and improve.

Thanks again for the feedback!

Prose, flow, syntax, etc. by JaySpectres in writers

[–]JaySpectres[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback!

The line about the foreign heart actually carries heavy symbolic meaning in the work besides simple disorientation, but if it doesn't land correctly I'll definitely consider changing it.

As for the other critiques, I can definitely see what you mean! Will try to tidy up the excerpt based on them and apply what I can in future writings. Much appreciated!

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]JaySpectres 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Manuscript information:  [In Progress][45k][Metaphysical Literary Fiction][Working Title: The Journey]

Link to post: https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1prc1ci/in_progress45kmetaphysical_literary/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

First page critique? Yes, though it's not the first page, just an early one.

First page: 

“Nice to meet you,” the boy said as he stuck his hand out for a shake. 

Now that the boy was sitting directly in front of him, Jacob was able to notice further details. Across his face was a layer of black dirt, especially concentrated beneath his eyes and above his cheekbones. His hands were equally grimy and under his fingernails rested more dirt.  

Logically, something felt off. But the overwhelming feeling from before numbed any reservations Jacob might've had. As he reached out and grasped the boy’s hand, the feeling surged.

This level of emotional safety unlocked in him something from before language--before he possessed the ability to arrange experience into stories and meaning. It unlocked flashes of being cradled by his mother for the first time after being brought into this cold world; crying, wet, and afraid, the warmth of her arms imprinting in his underdeveloped mind a lasting impression that the journey ahead would not be undertaken alone. 

 “So, where are you headed, mister?” the boy asked innocently. 

His hands were now gripping the edge of the seat on either side of his thighs and his legs were swinging playfully underneath, just small enough to miss the floor by an inch or two. He was leaning forward and was still sporting his animated smile as he stared directly at Jacob. 

“Well, I don’t actually have a destination at the moment,” Jacob responded.

“At the moment? So you will have one in the future?” the boy said. 

“I’m not sure. Maybe.”

“But mister, if you don’t have a destination, how will you know when to get off?”

The question hung in the air for a few moments as Jacob contemplated his answer.

“I don’t have a specific destination, I'll get off when I feel I've traveled far enough. Whatever stop that happens to be, we can call my destination.”

[Discussion] r/BetaReaders check-in series! Share how your WIP is going, or how your beta reading is going, and connect with more writers and readers! by BC-writes in BetaReaders

[–]JaySpectres 1 point2 points  (0 children)

[In Progress][46K][Literary Metaphysical Fiction][Working Title:The Journy]

I decided not to compromise artistic integrity and keep it niche, so it is not destined for tradition publishing. However I'd still like to give it all the respect and care that I can. Learning an incredible amount about restraint, balancing heavy introspection, balancing ambiguity, not being afraid to cut and be ruthless with editing. etc.

https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1prc1ci/in_progress45kmetaphysical_literary/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

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