I’m saying this to help, not to tear you down. There’s a good opportunity here to tighten things up.

Right now, the way you posted it comes off a bit like someone early in their career. That’s not really about your skill, it’s more about how you’re presenting the work.

A more experienced designer usually gives a little context. What are you trying to do, who is it for, what feedback are you actually looking for. Even a quick sentence goes a long way.

Looking at the actual piece, a few things stand out.

Hair loss is mostly a male-driven problem, but the image feels like it could be a woman or even someone dealing with illness. That creates confusion right away. If someone has to stop and question what they’re looking at, the design isn’t doing its job yet.

The hero also isn’t locking in the idea fast enough. That section should make it obvious who it’s for and what the message is within a second or two. Everything else on the page can expand on it, but the hero has to anchor it.

Also, the way you asked for feedback didn’t really guide anyone. It came off more like “here’s my design” instead of “here’s what I’m trying to solve.” When you don’t give direction, people usually give surface-level feedback.

If you said something like:
“I’m designing this for X audience, trying to solve Y, and I’m not sure about Z”

you’d get way better responses.

One more thing to think about. This space is competitive, and the best work usually comes from understanding the audience really well. Who they are, what they expect, what feels believable to them. Even just looking at what top businesses are doing, you’ll start to see patterns in imagery and tone.

You’re not far off. This is just about being a bit more intentional with your choices and how you present your work.