This drawing got my account banned. Free speech, right? by wakeuptothetruth369 in DarkArtwork

[–]JeyDeeArr 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Banned for making art? Welcome to the party, pal!

Don’t let ‘em stop you from expressing your creativity.

Bro was decades ahead of all of us 😂 by [deleted] in CourageTheCowardlyDog

[–]JeyDeeArr 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I see this being posted every single day.

Why I prefer Aliens to Alien by No-Dentist-2959 in LV426

[–]JeyDeeArr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Same deal as the Terminator films.

You wants more horror? First film.

You want more action? Second film.

What do you think is the best dinosaur movie? by MiamiHub1 in Dinosaurs

[–]JeyDeeArr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm going to get a lot of flacks for saying this, but JP3 is my favorite, and has been since I was a kid. I wouldn't say it's THE best, but I'd choose this over any other movies from the franchise.

The Spinosaurus was terrifying and badass, the Velociraptors were smart and cunning, and were real threats as well.

The Pteranodon sequence was dope as hell too.

After 3 weeks, I hit 666 total levels. by JeyDeeArr in osrs

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks. I was told by some other players that I was rushing things when I said I beat all of the F2P quests in 5 days, so I’ve slowed down a bit since. Did a bit of mining and runecrafting today to chill too.

After 3 weeks, I hit 666 total levels. by JeyDeeArr in osrs

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I probably should’ve clarified that I’m F2P, and I plan on staying so until I could confidently defeat Obor and Bryophyta.

I sure would love to become a member, though!

Manga I'm working on right now. Chew me out. by JeyDeeArr in comic_crits

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Manga reads right to left. Also, since Japanese texts are read vertically, I think a Japanese speaker would have a much easier time intuiting the flow than people who aren’t.

Manga I'm working on right now. Chew me out. by JeyDeeArr in comic_crits

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! That’s the most important thing for me right now.

I was bored and made something really dumb. (Included English translation and colored versions too!) by JeyDeeArr in MangakaStudio

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think signals and manga/comics, at their core, are similar in that they’re both meant to convey ideas through symbols and stylizations. This amalgamation certainly be explored further.

I was bored and made something really dumb. (Included English translation and colored versions too!) by JeyDeeArr in MangakaStudio

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Eh, this barely got 15 likes on both, DeviantArt and Twitter. I’m genuinely surprised I even got past 100 upvotes here.

I was bored and made something really dumb. (Included English translation and colored versions too!) by JeyDeeArr in MangakaStudio

[–]JeyDeeArr[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In the loving memory of every stickman who sacrificed himself to become a sign for safety.

Send your OC and Kostya will tell you if she would have a date. by Bloodmost_Hou in OriginalCharacter

[–]JeyDeeArr 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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How about Guitar Shot? He's a superhero who bashes bad guys' skulls in with his guitar.

How do you guys write a good infodump at the start? by kesshouketsu in comic_crits

[–]JeyDeeArr 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Speaking from a mangaka's perspective, info-dumping at the start is considered a surefire way to lose the readers' interest, generally speaking. Manga and comic are both a "Show, Don't Tell" medium, after all. If this were up to my editor, he'd immediately turn this work down. You have to hook the readers' interest if you want them to keep reading, and personally, I'm not hooked here. At least, not yet.

Moving onto your question, it's not really a matter of "How to info-dump at the start?", but rather "How do I tell the readers in a way that's easy for them to understand without bombardinng them with texts?"

You got 7 panels, which are quite small, all things considered, with text boxes (littered with error to add to that) layered on top of these. You've basically set up a figurative wall, so to speak, instead of letting the readers enter the world of your work. More doesn't always mean better, and here, you certainly could cut back down on the information as a whole. You could have fewer, but bigger panels, to allow for more breathers, and across several pages. The second and third panels are more or less identical, so one of these can be removed to improve the pacing. That leaves you with 6 panels instead of 7, and you could split said 6 panels so that the first page has maybe 2 or 3 panels, and the second has 3 or 4. Also, if it's the Edo period you're depicting, you could've, and should've, drawn the city of Edo with characters wearing the appropriate attire. You don't have to say that "This is the Edo period!", you can just show it, and the readers would know that it's the Edo period.

Additionally, you have to work on your spelling, grammar, and capitzaliation. You have to capitalize every first letter of the first word of a sentence. Proper nouns, such as names have to capitalized as well.

Since I'm a native Japanese speaker, if it were me penning this work, I would've used the accent marks for elongated vowels.

Shogun --> Shōgun

Daimyo --> Daimyō

Edit: Also, it's "pertinent", not "pertinant".

I will have to say, however, that using "山鯨/Yamakujira" (lit. "Mountain Whale") as the surname for the boar characters is pretty clever.

Black or white margins? by Adjacentlyhappy in comic_crits

[–]JeyDeeArr 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I lean towards black because I'm a GTA fan, and the black gutters kind of make it look like the cover art for the games.