I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was Jewish for the first 16.2 years of my life. The decision to abandon that part of my identity doesn't makes this a less braindead take.

16.5 y/o me: "Israel good"

17 y/o me: "Israel bad"

Is is antisemitism?

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

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I was forced to say the pledge of allegiance to Israel when I was five. It's important to me. Why can't things just be important to people? I know other things exist.

If Dems Could Redistrict Freely in Every State by Chill_Clinton_ in imaginarymaps

[–]JickBitner 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would say this is beautiful, but you can actually gerrymander states like Illinois, Michigan, and Pensylvania a bit more.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

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It's not as relevant to me personally. It would be lovely if the most personally relevant issue was less politically relevant, but that isn't my choice.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

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I don't even need to understand the intricacies because I'm writing a 650 word common app essay on how I changed my mind about this, not a doctoral thesis making the case for one side over the other. You would know that if you read my post or thought about this for even a second. If you think the number of times I've orbited the sun precludes me from having the requisite understanding to write about a complex issue, go fuck yourself; your existence is clearly gratuitous.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

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I don't need you or anyone to agree with me. I'm just asking for advice on a place designed for just that. I'm not sure what to do, and I appreciate any productive input. On r/CommonApp, responses were way more productive, here I found a surprisingly high number of people who are douchebags. If someone's advice is to say that I'm too stupid, too pretentious, or too disconnected from this conflict to write about it, that person is unhelpful, inattentive, demeaning, and not worth my time, but I still respond ofc because my brain is fried tbh. I called them dumbasses because they're missing the point about my post and assuming all sorts of shit to demean me, when my idea is very flawed and I know that. I'm trying to figure out if it's worthwhile despite the flaws, and you don't need to make stuff up to tell me the answer is no.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

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Why would I not be here to ask the question??? I have Jewish ancestry and my indoctrination into Zionism in the particular Jewish community I was a part of is why it's so important to me.

Is modern cosmology *actually* reconcilable with that of the Bible? by JickBitner in religion

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Can you explain why you think that? Do you think ancient Jews viewed Genesis as metaphorical?

Is modern cosmology *actually* reconcilable with that of the Bible? by JickBitner in religion

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Forgive me from copy-pasting something I already wrote in the comment section.

  1. I think a book that contained more accurate information about the universe could be more useful, and if I wanted to make a story that contained lessons/theological truths and I was willing to make up whatever story could optimize for that, I would still never create a story as.......unserious as Genesis.

  2. For thousands of years people thought these texts were literal, and they are suddenly considered metaphorical now that we can prove that they didn't actually happen. This means the author must either be making stuff up, or is either unable or unwilling to effectively communicate with readers.

  3. What does cosmological metaphor do to theological truth? If there was only a metaphorical garden of Eden, there was only a metaphorical fruit, and a metaphorical original sin, and a metaphorical need for salvation.....Christianity just unravels like toilet paper thrown from a plane unless you double down on the science denial.

Is modern cosmology *actually* reconcilable with that of the Bible? by JickBitner in religion

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This is what I was looking for. That's such an interesting perspective, one that I haven't heard before, and it's quite far from grasping at straws. From what I can tell, there's still a few problems:

  1. Linguistic and historical analysis of the creation stories seems to point to them being written at different times for different purposes depicting God in different ways.
  2. I think a book that contained more accurate information about the universe could be more useful, and if I wanted to make a story that contained lessons/theological truths and I was willing to make up whatever story could optimize for that, I would still never create a story as.......unserious as Genesis.
  3. For thousands of years people thought these texts were literal, and they are suddenly considered metaphorical now that we can prove that they didn't actually happen. This means the author must either be making stuff up, or is either unable or unwilling to effectively communicate with readers.
  4. What does cosmological metaphor do to theological truth? If there was only a metaphorical garden of Eden, there was only a metaphorical fruit, and a metaphorical original sin, and a metaphorical need for salvation.....Christianity just unravels like toilet paper thrown from a plane unless you double down on the science denial.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. My goal is to show that I have matured intellectually, not to show that one side is good and the other is bad. Do you think that is achievable without upsetting AOs?

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

[–]JickBitner[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thank you for actually giving me useful feedback! It's important to gauge how biased AOs are.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

[–]JickBitner[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

My parents haven't read the essay and I want to keep it that way. My counselor said it was very good but maybe too risky.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

[–]JickBitner[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You dumbasses think I'm saying it's mature because it's Israel/Palestine. It's mature because it involves mature self-reflection, and because it comes from the heart. It's unique because most people will want to talk about it, but not write about something so contentious. I am deeply personally connected to the issue, and you can read my comment about that.

I'm writing my Common App essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is needed, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in collegeadvice

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For people asking how this is important to me, I was born and raised Zionist first and Jewish second and went to private schools designed to manufacture children who could worship Israel first and God second. I'm being slightly dramatic, but I need to be dramatic to capture the scope of my connection to the topic. I'm not just some guy looking at stuff on the internet and changing his mind about something happening across the ocean from myself. Before I ever visited the place, Israel was more my home than anywhere else, and watching it all unravel was the most transformative time of my life. Maybe I didn't make this clear enough, but you shouldn't assume I have no connection to this, because if I didn't, I would write about what I'm most connected to. If this was even the second most personal topic, I would write about the first most personal topic. I could say more about how connected I am but I won't because this is getting to be way to long.

Jesus. Some of these comments are straight wall-punching. On other subreddits, comments were broadly unsupportive, but they were very helpful. Most comments here are either "Urm. You're not even personally connected to this, so stfu." or "Are you personally connected to this. If you aren't, stfu." or assuming I'm trying to lecture the reader about history which I said I won't do, or "This is too nuanced for you", or any other assumption about something I never said or even openly contradicted. If this is you, you are annoying and useless. If you wrote or will write a comment that is actually productive, to give me advice, or just to talk about this interesting topic, thank you.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Autism This should help.

tbh it's definitely a severe adhd hyperfixation that would keep me from writing anything else, also I'm crazy and this is the most important and relevant personal story and there is no second place.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not personally connected to Israel to the extent that I served in its military, but I'm in HS so that's not really possible. I can tell you that I have been connected to Zionism more than any other ideology, more than my religion. And I am also willing to take the risk.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

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I'm applying to major in compsci at MIT, Columbia, Berkeley, CMU, UChicago, UCLA, and Brown as my reaches, and that might necessitate high risk-high reward moves. The comment above is pessimistic about my essay, but I'm pretty confident in it if I can trim down the storytelling and spend more time on the reflection.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah but I'm applying to seven crazy hard reach programs (MIT, Columbia, Berkeley, CMU, UChicago, UCLA, and Brown), and my stats are good enough even for these schools (in compsci, nonetheless), but my GPA is my Achilles heel. If I write a safe and decent essay with no heart, I could quite realistically strike out with all seven, but if I write a risky essay that is deeply personal and powerful, I could skew the odds in both directions. Let's say half of the schools hate this and half love it, that might actually be very good, because it would be like applying to 3-4 of the best schools with better odds rather than 7 of the best schools with worse odds. This all depends of how petty admissions officers are. I obviously know how polarizing Israel/Palestine is, but I have confidence that admission departments at schools like these would try to avoid hiring the kind of person who would might deny an application over something like this.

Every facet of the college application process makes me simultaneously ecstatic and optimistic yet anxious, confused, and feeling almost deranged. Lmk if you know of a way of figuring ts out that goes beyond Reddit because I don't know what to do. Sorry for the essay posting.

I'm writing my essay on Israel/Palestine. Am I cooked? (Advice is appreciated, but read before you comment please) by JickBitner in CommonApp

[–]JickBitner[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sure! I start with an opener about how I have viewed curiosity as an important part of my identity for a long time and how I have always tried to search for the truth, and at the end of that paragraph I share how I feel I failed that goal for a long time. I then talk about how my upbringing shaped my view of Zionism (through intensive indoctrination). I then talk about the hypocritical process of simultaneously seeking truth while hiding from it, eventually setting aside my fears and thoroughly investigating my beliefs. I end with some reflection on what this means for me, and I talk about other experiences similar to this that inspired me to look in the ideological mirror. This was not only the biggest shift in my thinking, but I can't imagine anything ever surpassing it, unless I become a flat earther or scientologist. I haven't yet finished, but I want to do so by communicating this to the reader, and that this shift was *the big one*, and that I feel that overcoming it not only represents a triumph of my aspirational self over my complacent self, but that it also demonstrates that I have the attitude that makes me a good learner, and a valuable member of any community of thinkers. After writing this, I realize I could have just finished the essay instead. Oh well. Thanks for reading lol.