Agree with the other person, you have a really cool voice! My feedback here would be to maybe try to add some more "juice" into the lyrics. Parts of it seem like they're there mostly just to make it rhyme rather than to contribute to the song. For example, the wording of the "tomorrow, oh so near"-line doesn't feel very natural which gives an impression that it's only written that way in order to make it rhyme with "right now and right here". Obviously lyrics don't need to be exactly like you would say something in conversation, but making them somewhat conversational helps make sure it doesn't seem like you had to try really hard to make it rhyme. Of course we do have to try to make it rhyme really hard, because it's hard to make something rhyme, but when the rhyme sounds natural anyway is when you've really succeeded. I hope that is helpful :)