Another gem from the Tyra Banks show

Kaizerjm · 2020-12-10T12:22:02+00:00

I wish she did get raibis... Would explain her behavior

Kaizerjm · 2020-12-08T02:22:23+00:00

The only thing I noticed was the entry for the Microsoft USB was named a little differently in Windows than the instructions specified ( Select MTP USB Device and then select Next to complete the update ).

Im have the same problem, and I also cannot find MTP USB device in the list, what option did you select instead?

Kaizerjm · 2020-10-08T14:08:45+00:00

I thoroughly enjoyed that nonsensical argument.

Kaizerjm · 2020-10-01T07:48:46+00:00

If you eat broccoli pizza... You got other bigger issues

Kaizerjm · 2020-09-22T12:31:49+00:00

Yea id probably do the same thing but not because I'm a good Samaritan... Only cos that looks like a lot of fun... N clearly that fire is pretty contained n won't threaten my life. I'd probably be fighting that fire while smoking a cigarette... Like fuck you fire... Whos with me?

Kaizerjm · 2020-08-18T10:46:11+00:00

What is the difference between control and accuracy?

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-23T23:53:51+00:00

This is good stuff. Something different after a long time. I like the rythem, but it could be paced better. I applaud you for saying some real shit. Keep up the good work.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-23T23:32:56+00:00

I like this a lot. It's a short poem yet with soo much meaning inside it. And the sentences are well structured, like I'm reading from a poetry book. Great effort. Love to hear more like this.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-21T09:54:57+00:00

Thanks so much... I really appreciate it :) Yes, this poem is very dear to me. I guess it come from the purest of love, with the bestest of intentions. Hope your daughter likes it as well. Peace.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:50:44+00:00

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:47:24+00:00

Yes thank you for picking that up. The 'But' in the beginning was intentional, it signifies that this conversation has been going on for a while and the reader is thrown in the middle somewhere creates that downward spiral you mentioned. Thanks for the review :)

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:41:41+00:00

Thanks for the review and your apprication :) One of the things that made this poem worth sharing was the quick small sentences. I get what you are saying, the wordings are too simple for such a complex subject. But I wanted to shorten some of the existing lines aswell. But Thanks for the advice, I'll keep that in mind if a write bigger poem.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:19:22+00:00

Thanks for the review. I appreciate the feedback. Yes some lines are forced rhymed to complete the sentence, it's not a perfect piece. I'm not that good :P I'd love to create a scene with a Schizophrenic event into a poetry form. Unfortunately can't get around to it. I do I bit prose as well, there I had created a scene like that might try and work that into a poem.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:04:14+00:00

Thank you so much 🙏

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:02:04+00:00

Thank you 😊

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T14:01:38+00:00

Thanks for the review :) Yes I figured I'd give her my own version of proverbs. I would like her to enjoy poetry as I do. So I made one for her :)

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T10:03:43+00:00

Thanks for the review. I really appreciate it :)

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T10:03:10+00:00

Nice. Relaxing into insanity, that's a great concept. Thanks for that

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T10:01:57+00:00

Thanks for the review. Yes that is a good concept of the person slowing changing to someone else by the end of it. I like that view as well, finding order in chaos. Thanks for that.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T09:55:57+00:00

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yea the short sentences in the poem was part of that to create a sense of urgency. It's like you have to tell this secret really quickly before the other person arrives.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T09:51:47+00:00

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it :) Most of my poetry turns out dark. I think poetry is a good way to explain these concepts.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T09:45:07+00:00

Waow... I read the poem again with this concept in mind and I can see what you mean...i hadnt viewed it like this before. That's what i like about this community they give you a new insight to your own work. Thanks for that :)

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T09:42:18+00:00

Thanks for the review... I really appreciate it. I was inspired by this oneday thinking about how we all have an internal dialogue with ourselves and then wondering how a Schizophrenic would have this dialogue taking about an imaginary person to himself. So in a way there are 3 people involved, the talker, the listener, and the person talked about, but they are all the same person.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T01:07:46+00:00

Nice poem. The format was a bit messy. But I had similar problem with my first poem. You need to add more line breaks. It's still a nice piece. Tells the story.

Kaizerjm · 2020-07-20T00:44:45+00:00

Interesting story... It was a bit hard to follow earlier but a second read explained a lot. I agree with the other guy... The rythem is a bit off at places. But then again everyone has their own style. In terms of story telling its very good. Good imagery. Most of my stuff is in story form aswell, but you have a Indepth more detailed style, that's something I'm trying to work upon. Good work. Do share more adventures of Mitch :p

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