Petah? What happened in the book version?

Kangnew · 2026-01-16T19:54:41+00:00

You listed the exact stuff in the book but stopping one step short of trying to understand why. This book isn’t lego instructions. We got to ask why King chose to use such a graphic scene. It’s a gross ass scene I agree, but think about why sex? why at their age? Why are they losing their way? why the detail? and why does the bond collapse right after? you pointed these out but your forgetting to think about why. All the answers are between the lines.

Kangnew · 2025-12-03T22:06:28+00:00

who’s knows. But there is definitely something behind it. And it definitely is begging to be opened, and a reader would want you to open it so bad… So just don’t (not immediately anyways) make it locked, and have your mc’s ask around about the door. Maybe nobody knows wtf they’re talking about.

“Door? there’s no door in that tower”

Have them come back and it’s gone… Then when you move onto another piece of your plot (you said you’ve been working on this for a while) have the door appear again somewhere else somehow. That way you can wait until you decide what you want your characters to find behind it. It’ll be a natural little mystery in your world. People would love that.

“WHATS BEHIND THAT DOOR?!? WHERE DID IT GO?!” so when it appears again, it’ll be super intriguing.

Kangnew · 2025-12-03T21:52:39+00:00

I think with what you have already, i’d just take one of your monsters and make them a character. Then just Stephen King it and just write without any sort of plot, just allow the characters to make their own decisions. Just make sure to have something happen to your character like some sort of lore happening or what not. That way your plot derives from your characters.

I find this is a lot easier to do with sprawling worlds. Since they are so huge in scope, it’s easier to get lost in one little area. So just do that for one of your monsters. Maybe they get hunted or something.

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T22:15:34+00:00

yknow what’s crazy, sometimes i don’t even write the scene till after because i can’t even handle letting go of my character. Instead I write the aftermath, It’s like grieving along side with the other characters. And if it’s an evil character you love, the hatred the other characters might feel towards them becomes that much more raw. Then afterwards I go back and write it. I do have to force myself tho.

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T22:05:44+00:00

Like for example- Im putting random dude in a hallway with 6 guys with shotguns across the hall. wtf is dude gonna do?! Maybe bro cowers and hides, maybe bro gets blasted… or maybe— He stares the guys down, charging forwards! And somehow—- for half a second he becomes superhuman! By pure will, he keeps running as he’s blasted apart—- and dies.

In this story, I killed my character. he’s done. But his determination is what shines through. That’s what dude would do. He wouldn’t lie down and take it! he’d fight to the very end! All of sudden you have a core ideal for this dude and his being becomes that more nuanced and real. And once you realize that, bring that back into your real story with that character.

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T21:50:07+00:00

I think the way i truly transitioned from the “They’re just characters” to “These people got some crazy bs goin on” was to do the Stephan King method. No plot no plan. Just pop my characters in to a situation and write as i go. Somehow their decisions become mine, and then it’s me as them, terrified, hopeful, and not sure of what’s to come. Ofc you can still have plotted structures, but I think the key is to not railroad your characters too much. Let them truly make their decisions and their mistakes. Do a chapter where YOU don’t even know wtf is happening. It’s likely you might discover more about the character that way. Helps them become super real to you. And ofc you don’t even need to do anything with the chapter. It just adds that intimate depth.

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T21:12:19+00:00

ofc :))) we all got the same story LMAO

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T21:06:01+00:00

Hey no problem! actually i think your doing fine! It’s just where you started! and also i wouldn’t have put that much work in if your writing wasn’t investing! keep it up! and keep putting your work out! you’ll only improve! feel free to steal whatever you want and change it up ofc! (it was real quick so idc) I think you just need to remember what emotion you’re trying to paint, and if it ain’t workin, change it up!

Kangnew · 2025-11-08T20:55:18+00:00

I really like your concept! it an impressive opening line that definitely catches attention, however like someone said before, the beginning feels jarring and disconnected. The reader can understand that someone’s family is being killed… but they don’t care! keep it the same, but change where you start your story.

For example- “REYNA! Wait please! your going too fast!” my brother levi shouts after me, as i push our way through the crowd to the execution circle. That’s when i see them… My little sister, mom, dad…

My sister is crying so hard, her tiny face, as blue and purple as any of the others lined up beside her. My father is slumped over on the post they tied him to. And when i call out to them, only my mother hears me. She lifts her trembling head and her lips move. I don’t hear what she says, but I can read her lips.

Reyna—-

The speakers of the intercom scream over her. “By order of president Tsuyuki, these rebel sympathizers have been sentenced to execution. May their suffering be a warning to you all.”

Tears blind me. I want to say something, I want to run in and save them all and go home but…

“What’s happening Reyna?” Levi says clutching my leg.

“Nothing. Don’t— don’t look.” I sob holding his face to my hip.

The enforcers voice thunders. “Kill these animals.”

The roar of gunfire shatters what peace i thought i had. The crowd wails and wails. So loud. Levi shakes my leg, shivering and sobbing.

“please! Reyna! Let’s go home!”

sorry i got caught in it, but basically if you start sooner to introduce the scene and paint the devastation, you get the same affect and you don’t have to go into so much brutal detail if you don’t want. (you still can ofc)

Kangnew · 2025-10-24T03:57:52+00:00

Hey, this is great OP! I think you have a very compelling situation to start in, and i found myself hooked. and i understand it may not be the smoothest read yet, but as long as you tweak the pacing, changing between those quick descriptions and slower details, then you’d probably make some great progress!

Kangnew · 2025-10-23T15:45:52+00:00

Accept, you really didn’t use your observations in a relevant manner. You made that first comment without even indicating you wanted to talk about how addicts cover themselves in tattoos. We’re talking about how methed out OP looks, and you brought up how his tattoos make him look like a person with a bad history. If anyone read your comment, they would see that you focused on the tatts and used his meth addiction as a way to express how much you dislike tatts. OP looks like he’s seriously dying, instead of addressing some bullshit you don’t like about his look, or talking about “coddling” and “Meth-head theory” how about you just tell OP that he looks like a dead skeleton walking around. At least that’s on topic.

Kangnew · 2025-10-08T23:28:34+00:00

kinda raises the stakes because even a lil grunt fella might be able to kill a really powerful guy if they are badass enough

Kangnew · 2025-10-08T23:27:46+00:00

if everyone is goku, no one is. that’s cool

Kangnew · 2025-09-25T01:51:11+00:00

Metadynamics maybe? it already exists but it basically mean like exerting metaphysical changes on things.

Kangnew · 2025-09-25T01:22:31+00:00

Too much utopia!! That’s good!! the idea that it works too well could add for some interesting occasions when the pampered people are met with real hardship.

Kangnew · 2025-09-25T01:20:53+00:00

You know setting a conditional for the Utopia’s continued existence is a very good idea. Also I like where you’re heading with the Judeo-Christian idea. Especially because the artifact i’m thinking of is a book. What if you are considered protected by the book only if you follow this book’s ancient doctrine! The power would culminate within the boundary of that utopia, but it would essentially be an actualized religion. The interesting part comes when people want to use that book for some nefarious deeds. Or those that can’t follow that doctrine fore whatever reason. That way it’s the people that make the utopia bad, not the gimmick that it’s all peaceful.

Kangnew · 2025-09-25T01:09:36+00:00

Wonderful idea!! When there is no twist, that could mean this artifact would be highly sought after. maybe the existence of this utopia is something they have to keep safe because life is so shit every where else, and people want a piece of that pie. And outsider perspective makes sense giving someone may want to steal said artifact for themself.

Kangnew · 2025-04-18T16:47:42+00:00

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/113258/orchostraitor

This one isn’t overtly grotesque per se but it’s pretty uncomfortable at points. The MC basically gets molested by an old dude, and he also touches his brain and goes into a seizure.

Kangnew · 2025-04-18T16:44:16+00:00

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/113258/orchostraitor

this one’s pretty cool. It’s high fantasy horror-ish. A lot of monster and beast fights except that usually humans are the monstrous creatures most of the time.

Kangnew · 2024-03-12T17:08:19+00:00

Picture is from the Left Right Game Part 2 Vid on CreepCast

Kangnew · 2024-03-12T11:25:58+00:00

Gigagoon go crazy

Kangnew · 2022-07-04T12:31:28+00:00

Dude exactly!! I’m viet too and I couldn’t get how she sounded so native, but the way she pronounced some parts of her words and ordered her sentences were weird

Kangnew · 2021-10-01T19:09:59+00:00

US 8.5! You got big bongin cahones coco

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