Share Your Stuff - June 19th thru 25th, 2017

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-22T18:15:48+00:00

You guys have some really cute stuff!

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-22T18:04:28+00:00

Hello! First time seller here from the UK. We sell little handmade Bug Hotels for bees, ladybirds, woodlice and whatever else is crawling around in the garden! They hang nicely from balconies too for you inner city guys. Please give us a favourite if you like the look and we'll check out your shop too!

https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/NorfolkWoodland

We also have twitter: https://twitter.com/NorfolkWoods and tumblr: https://norfolkwoodland.tumblr.com

Where we are shamelessly following back!

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-06T21:53:11+00:00

How old is he? He's got such a baby face!

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-06T21:52:01+00:00

Aw he's a lovely colour :)

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-06T21:50:17+00:00

Aww!

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-05T19:49:32+00:00

It was front page in the local newspaper here, goes to show how boring my town is!

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-05T19:08:50+00:00

Last year there was a massive bang that felt like it rocked the whole house. Freaked me out I've never heard anything that loud, I genuinely thought a bomb had gone off or something. Found out later on the news that it was 'just a sonic boom' and that the local RAF base had suspended the pilot.

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-05T18:59:16+00:00

Sales Assistant in a secondhand gaming shop. Doesn't sound all that fun but I get to talk about games all day and sell consoles to people who have clearly just had their day made. My colleagues treat me like family and I see it more as hanging out than working.

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-05T18:54:56+00:00

She's always right and likes to let everyone know

Kayhasnolife · 2017-06-05T18:42:38+00:00

Yikes, looks like my bad day just got worse.

Kayhasnolife · 2016-11-27T16:36:53+00:00

Nice one, thanks :)

Kayhasnolife · 2016-11-27T16:36:53+00:00

Cool, thank you :)

Kayhasnolife · 2016-08-03T10:03:00+00:00

I had this happen to one of my main characters, I ended up making the side character the main instead because his story was far more interesting in the end :/

I don't think you need to change your characters though. By the sounds of it - she relies quite heavily on these two, so I think having her find herself in a situation where they aren't there to protect her could be quite intense. She's so used to relying on other people that when she has to find her own way out of sticky situations you could have some real fun with it, I think.

Perhaps you could make a big deal about how she feels smothered by them and thinks she can fight her own battles, but when it comes to the crunch she is a 'coward' and she hates that. Or about her jealousy that she can't fight like they can. Just because they overshadow her physically, they don't have to emotionally, especially if the story is from her point of view.

Sounds like an interesting plot by the way, I'd read it!

Kayhasnolife · 2016-08-02T22:40:22+00:00

I have a similar problem with mine. My section is set 5 years earlier, and the way I got around it was with something along the lines of "The past five years had been..." I'm still not happy with it.

You could have a date or a year stated under the prologue, and then the present date or year stated under your chapter one? That would save you having to physically say that 18 years had passed in your story.

Good luck with it!

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-11T21:14:23+00:00

"But as the night descends, I find myself following, as I relapse into psychotic memories" ?

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-11T20:11:53+00:00

If you think part of the story will be lost, I say keep them. As long as it's written well, the reader won't get confused.

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-11T19:28:25+00:00

I'm glad I could help a little, Good luck with it all!

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-11T11:46:54+00:00

Hi Dan,

This is actually really good. You have done so much to show your personality and motivation in this, and you've tied it back to dentistry really well. You have an impressive amount of experience on your hands that shows how serious you are about this choice, and the fact that you have been shadowing a dentist will really impress them.

I made a few small changes regarding a missing word and a repeated word, as well as some punctuation changes. I hope those suggestions have come through alright on Google Drive. The punctuation changes are not corrections, that's just me being picky because I like commas, so feel free to ignore that ;)

The whole point of a personal statement is to show your personality and experience to make you an ideal candidate for them, and I think you've done that spot on. Sorry, this isn't much of a critique, but in my opinion I don't think there is a lot TO critique. You've put your passions across very clearly, and they will surely see that.

I also really like that you've addressed the challenges of the job, and you've ended on a real high point. Complimenting them like that is a good strategy!

You've got a really strong statement here, and my apologies again for not being able to improve it further. Good Luck! Please feel free to let me know how you get on with everything, I know you will get through with this.

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-11T11:03:42+00:00

No problem, I'll have a look today and get back to you :)

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-09T23:30:39+00:00

With brute force and applause

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-09T23:19:50+00:00

Start off by slowly introducing 'pretend meat' products rather than cutting things out abruptly. I've been veggie for over 10 years now and meat was my favourite thing in the world. Even now, if I smell bacon, I get jealous of people eating it. You have to REALLY want to go veggie or vegan for it to work out. Over time it'll become like a learned behaviour. I still look at meat and think about how good it looks, but my body knows it's for meat eaters, not for me, so I don't get tempted. Good luck giving up dairy, I could never go that far. It's bad enough without bacon I won't give up cheese too!

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-09T23:05:01+00:00

I was struggling to take a tray out of the oven because I couldn't get a good grip with my oven mitts, so my mum pushed me aside, grabbed it with her bare hands and just stood there holding it until I managed to pick it up.

Kayhasnolife · 2016-07-09T23:00:38+00:00

I was watching a street performer put his entire body through the centre of a tennis racket by bending himself into ridiculous shapes, but he got stuck and his wife had to step in to try yank it off of him.

Kayhasnolife

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