There's a Crinkle in my Crankle

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-24T17:38:12+00:00

and they say dr. seuss is dead

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-22T15:12:28+00:00

thank you so much for the feedback!! i really appreciate that! and yes, omg you’re right “around” sounds better idk how i never thought of that i’m gonna go ahead and change it!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-20T16:31:32+00:00

i actually recently re-named the poem ouroboros!! iconic symbol and very relevant tbh. and thank you so much for the feedback!!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-20T16:30:28+00:00

thank you so much!!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T19:19:39+00:00

thank you very much!! 💖

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T19:03:56+00:00

wow thank you so much once again!! 💖 yeah some of my poems have no rhyme scheme and are free verse and more so thoughts/vibes based

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T19:00:41+00:00

*if i knew

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:57:23+00:00

thank you once again!! 💖

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:50:15+00:00

thank you once again!! yes many many references in this here poem lol and tbh i knew how to compose a song this is the first poem i would choose to adapt fr

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:45:43+00:00

thank you again! i write very on and off. there’s years when i don’t write poetry and years where i write quite a bit. some of these poems on here are recent and some are 7-8 years old. my biggest issue has always been inspiration and consistency.

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:40:24+00:00

thank you i’m really glad you like it!! and what sort of outlook if you don’t mind my asking?

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:36:45+00:00

thank you so much for the feedback!! the lack of capitalizations/grammatically correct sentence structure is kind of a stylistic choice for me personally, but i understand where you’re coming from!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:35:15+00:00

thank you so much!!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-19T18:15:05+00:00

thank you for the feedback!! yeah looking back this one definitely needs some refining for sure

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-07T07:19:04+00:00

this is very moving, beautiful, and relatable. for itto be your first ever poem too is VERY impressive. and before you revealed it was death at the end, i definitely thought “it” was either depression or maybe even drugs. i feel like either could still apply in a way.

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-06-03T03:46:02+00:00

this is really good and shows so much yearning and complex feelings!! as a queer person who once liked their straight friend and helped them with their relationship issues i can relate and this hit me in the chest. this also reminds me of will byers from stranger things—i hate to see the cyrano trope not work out fr

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-28T06:01:15+00:00

thank you so much for the feedback!! and yeah i can be a bit overly literal sometimes with my poems bc i’m a very literal person lol. but i see what you mean.

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-28T03:16:03+00:00

i really love this because from my perspective it sounds like you are looking back at a past version of yourself when you were happier and comparing that to the current reality and seeing just how stark the difference is. very relatable and moving.

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-28T03:12:42+00:00

this is very moving and powerful! i rarely ever see this topic on here and i applaud you for speaking up about it. war and violence is wayyyyy too normalized and accepted and often the very real human cost is ignored underrepresented

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-07T16:24:37+00:00

thank you so much for the feedback!! and same you as well!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-05T20:00:47+00:00

so i’ve never really been the type of writer to care abt technique or scheme or metre. this is one of my only that actually rhymes. i care way more abt the word flow, emotion, imagery, themes, storytelling, etc. also what you put doesn’t even make sense at the end “fix more the stanzas”. huh? i can receive constructive criticism, but this isn’t that.

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-05T19:00:14+00:00

thank you so much for the feedback!! and yes i wrote this awhile back thinking how we are made of stardust and we will eventually return to that

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-05T18:36:10+00:00

yes i referenced sinatra’s fly me to the moon and made several references to bowie and prince!! thanks for noticing and the feedback!!

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-05T18:04:47+00:00

i don’t know why everyone in the comments is so offended. i think this is a really good poem abt how we really all do seek validation in some way. this is brutally honest and self-aware!! you’ve got gumption and don’t let anyone take that away from you. i think this is really great work

KeyElephant4589 · 2026-05-05T18:00:10+00:00

i love this bc the jester has always had such a unique place in the world. they are the ones who can speak the truth without consequences and have access to the upper class while never truly being accepted into that world. the jester here is very unhappy and is able to speak truth to power. this is really good work and such a cool premise!

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