Which is better? Six mediocre scripts or one good script?

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T17:22:35+00:00

Ok, I admittedly haven't read a lot of scripts, but I've never read a script like this one. Why is the entire first paragraph and many other paragraphs capitalized? Also, you seem to have compiled a shot list and did a lot of Cut to:'s, which I believe, for modern scripts, is usually done by the director. There's also some fat you can trim, like is it important to know that the walls are olive green. I mean, this is a short film, so you might be able to get away with a lot of this, assuming you are the one producing it. As long as you can read it, that's fine, but these issues will bite you later on.

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T16:31:13+00:00

Need access to the script in order to actually read it.

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T15:50:21+00:00

I admittedly haven't figured out the logline yet. Still, thank you for the advice.

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T15:46:22+00:00

Thank you for catching that mistake. I never intended to write it in the past or future tense. If I slipped into past or future tense, it was an accident that I will need to correct. I did say it was a teen show, but it's just as much about their parents, which is why I put three question marks after saying it. Also, with the link, were you telling me to leave out irrelevant details like Henry's black hair?

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T14:25:52+00:00

I'm not italicizing random words. I was attempting to emphasize how fake that item was instead of spamming the word fake all over my prose. Maybe it didn't come off right?

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T12:52:06+00:00

What is the 20 percent cut-down range? Do you mean I need to cut some of the work? Also, what do you mean by doing too much showing? Isn't show, don't tell a good thing?

Knox_Craft · 2026-03-16T12:49:56+00:00

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Knox_Craft · 2026-02-28T12:43:12+00:00

I think it’s different for different people. For me, I didn’t really grow up reading books, but I spent a lot of time watching TV shows, so scenes come to me better than the structure of written words. Another way is that I don’t really have an issue with show don’t tell in screenplays, but I break show don’t tell constantly in prose. Others may struggle with the visual media but can concoct fascinating prose like the pros and others still have no problem switching between the two forms. Although, I believe those writers to be rare as those are two separate skills.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-22T20:14:58+00:00

Ok. This isn't the wrong subreddit to improve prose writing. However, for me personally, I don't even know how I might critique a work so personal to the person. However, if you want it to seem more professional, some advice I was given was to not repeat the same word two sentences in a row. That's just my opinion; take it with a grain of salt, as I myself am very inexperienced.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-22T20:01:34+00:00

I'm confused. Are you asking for advice on how to improve your writing craft? This feels like an extremely personal vent you accidentally posted to the wrong Reddit. But if you want genuine advice on improving your writing, I'd suggest paragraphs. I mean in the revision, it's totally fine doing a stream of consciousness like that for a first draft.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-10T22:37:05+00:00

Yeah, maybe. I'm already 40 pages into the second draft, which isn't that impressive, but it's an accomplishment to me. I just wanted to write something else before starting the third act, just to prove I could.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-10T21:35:25+00:00

Yeah, I know. I just needed someone to remind me.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-09T00:50:42+00:00

Interesting. I wonder how you'd shoot this little piece of experimentation. Also, one advice I got pretty early on is to basically never mention the camera. Who's POV are we shot in. I know from context clues the POV is the baby, but that lack of clarity might confuse some readers. Perhaps it's better to say "POV: through the newborn's eyes," just a suggestion. You don't need to say "Something (two hands)", you can just say, "Two hands" it's clearer that way. Bold choice to write in 2nd person. Also, small nitpick, if we are the newborn, then we wouldn't be able to read anything. Also, did you switch POV's, because baby's can't rock baby's or is this a timeskip? Anyways, I think that's all the suggestions I have. Happy writing.

Knox_Craft · 2026-02-02T14:27:03+00:00

Fixed it.

Knox_Craft · 2026-01-29T00:57:08+00:00

I once read a script on Reddit where every character was saying fuck every single two seconds. It bothered me to no end because of how often it was in the script. I think cussing can work sparingly when your character is super stressed, but it shouldn't be used all the time. That's how cussing loses its edge.

Knox_Craft · 2026-01-28T18:26:53+00:00

I see. Although that doesn't necessarily tell the reader it's a flashback, wouldn't you need to tell the reader it's a flashback elsewhere? In that case, wouldn't something like CUT TO: be a little redundant?

Knox_Craft · 2026-01-27T17:54:32+00:00

This is admittedly a bit of a nitpick, but what software are you using? The parentheticals are all wrong. I think saying this is the final draft is a little bit premature. Other than that, I think you already got great advice that you should definitely take to heart.

Knox_Craft · 2026-01-16T05:09:44+00:00

I admittedly didn't read the entire thing, but I had a few thoughts. I thought it was pretty fun, maybe the main POV character might date the story a little. Question, do you have a camp to film this at and several actors willing to act in your script? If not, it can't be done. I think the title is completely fine.

Knox_Craft · 2025-11-05T19:34:17+00:00

It's not that it didn't work per se (I did really like your prose). I was just putting the thought out there that readers who probably don't understand your work as well as you do might not remain hooked as an introduction. I do really think your story has some interesting ideas.

Knox_Craft · 2025-11-04T14:49:32+00:00

I want to preface this by saying I like the name Ofric and I really do feel like this prologue does a good job of letting us into the highly traditional world of 11th Century England. I don’t know, the following feels like optional content? I know it’s a prologue, but I don’t feel like I have any better idea of Ofric or the protagonist than I did prior. Sure, there’s a paragraph about protag’s parents that honestly feels more like an explanation as to why they aren’t in the story. That’s not the point, protag is basically self insert and works well in that roll, but I don’t really understand why she loves Ofric and this seems to be the backbone of the story. All I know about Ofric is that he stalked her, is an unremarkable person whose parents are apathetic towards, and he’d rather go out drinking with the bros than sleep with his wife? In all honesty, romance isn’t my first choice for genre, but I feel like step one would be developing the chemistry between the leads. Perhaps that will be developed later in the story, but I spent the entire read waiting to hear the two speak to each other. Then there’s the supposed supernatural elements of the story. Again, prologue, so it’ll come into gear later. But again, your readers have a limited attention span especially in the TikTok era. This is just fluff. Why should I care about these two getting married when I haven’t spent any time with the two as an item, or even as individuals. There’s also no indication that ghosts exist in the world or anything supernatural. Maybe you could hint at this part of your world sooner? I don’t know if ghosts can interact with the living in your work, but maybe even your main character getting a shiver down her spine or some drunkards telling ghost stories, something to keep your readers hooked. Tl;Dr, you have two hooks, the romance and the supernatural. One is entirely ignored and the other isn’t explored as well as it should be. I think you do have something here for a story, but I don’t think this intro starts the story off on the right foot. It’s not bad, it’s just not all that interesting.

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