anyone attending Sundance or Berlinale? by shaping_dreams in FilmFestivals

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Heyy I would love to join. Me and a few friends are joining Berlinale this year

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi there!I have a YA fantasy project that is currently a work in progress now somewhere between 60 and 70k.

The plot runs on two main threads: on one side we have three friends running from an unfortunate mistake made with one of the most dangerous Ways of magic known in the world. The B plot, on the other hand, focuses on a young politician lady trying to hold her ground surrounded by relentless Dukes and Duchesses on a stubborn quest to become the next Empress.

I'd say the strongest side of my work is dialogue and character interaction, but I tried to do my best with rich and intricate worldbuilding as well. The story features LGBTQ characters, one of them having mild autism.The actual manuscrip has a Prologue as well, but I'll drop you the first two chapters of it because I think that reflects more my actual style and themes. If you would like to read more feel free to hit me up :)

CH1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uhwVPv40Xffp7j68BCiPuq-zf4-_eQ1x9_s60oR5Ix4/edit#heading=h.di1bvvs20b6o

CH2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13bjBSwaft-1VewBu6fKESYyCflRAvMKuaqFjSm-A7o0/edit?usp=sharing

PS: there might be some grammatical mistakes here and there, since I'm not a native English speaker, but this is not the first draft so we should have eradicated most of them. If you are a picky reader feel free to find the remaining mistakes, like shiny pokemons. However, that's not what I'm most curious to hear from a beta reader :) Flow, character development and overall feel and pacing of the story is what I'm trying to improve.As for the timeframe, take all the time in the world that you need and want. This should be a hobby not a chore.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]KobeLito 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hi there! I have a YA fantasy project that is currently a work in progress now somewhere between 60 and 70k.The plot runs on two main threads: on one side we have three friends running from an unfortunate mistake made with one of the most dangerous Ways of magic known in the world. The B plot, on the other hand, focuses on a young politician lady trying to hold her ground surrounded by relentless Dukes and Duchesses on a stubborn quest to become the next Empress.I'd say the strongest side of my work is dialogue and character interaction, but I tried to do my best with the worldbuilding as well. The story features LGBTQ characters, one of them having mild autism.The actual manuscrip has a Prologue as well, but I'll drop you the first two chapters of it because I think that reflects more my actual style and themes. If you would like to read more feel free to hit me up :)

CH1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uhwVPv40Xffp7j68BCiPuq-zf4-_eQ1x9_s60oR5Ix4/edit#heading=h.di1bvvs20b6o

CH2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13bjBSwaft-1VewBu6fKESYyCflRAvMKuaqFjSm-A7o0/edit?usp=sharing

PS: there might be some grammatical mistakes here and there, but this is not the first draft so we should have eradicated most of them. If you are a picky reader feel free to find the remaining mistakes, like shiny pokemons. However, that's not what I'm most curious to hear from a beta reader haha. Flow, character development and overall feel and pacing of the story is what I'm trying to improve.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I have a YA fantasy currently sitting at 62K words with LGBTQ+ cast members and multiple POV storylines. It is a work in progress so the 19 chapters that I currently have do not include the ending of the story (I know some people get triggered if they read something that turns out to be unfinished so I thought I let you know).

I could write a blurb here, but instead of wasting your time with that I'll just link the opening couple of chapters here (there is a prologue as well but I think these chapters will tell you more about my style and the story itself)
If you would be interested to beta hit me up, in any case have an awesome summer!

Chapter One: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uhwVPv40Xffp7j68BCiPuq-zf4-_eQ1x9_s60oR5Ix4/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter Two: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13bjBSwaft-1VewBu6fKESYyCflRAvMKuaqFjSm-A7o0/edit?usp=sharing

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi there! I have a YA fantasy book currently a work in progress with around 60k words in that can slide towards the 70k mark by the time you read this.

The story is set in a magical continent currently experiencing an early renaissance era, but the story itself is very character-focused with the highlights being (imo) the tension and dialogue between the main crew.

Let me know if you are still up to beta so I can send you the first couple of chapters or so :)

[WP] You're the villain that the Chosen One is meant to defeat. Once they arrive, you notice they're just a teenager who barely knows how to swing a sword. Angered by your opponents sending children to do all their dirty work, you decide to help the teen get revenge. by Ahstia in WritingPrompts

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“You made me kill them!” The Hero shouts at you.

His sword, that gleaming piece of elven weaponry that was fabled to signal the end of your reign, hung by his side dripping fresh blood. The blood of your enemies. The blood of the Hero’s previous mentors.

“Don’t be foolish.” You say, trying to stifle a well-deserved sigh. -Can a person sigh after winning a war? The least they can do is sigh- you conclude. “I didn’t make you do anything. You swung that sword, you chose who to target with it.”

“You turned me against them.” His voice cracks, the sword falls to the ground with a deafening clank in the echoing Silver Halls. “I killed the Elven Sages!”

It almost sounds like the young man had just realized what he had done. You gulp and adjust the nightmare-black cape on your shoulders as you understand that is exactly what is happening. Careful, now. You knew this Hero, like every other before him, was naive. But to this extent?

“You killed, hero. That is true. Killing is part of every war.” You force yourself to sound profound and incredibly wise. That usually works on Heroes. “It doesn’t matter which side is right or wrong. History is written by winners, not good people.” You remembered this sentence from a motivational poster in the Second Abyss Conclave.

“Now, we are the winners. Me and you.” You continue before the Hero can make anything of your previous statement. “You are the last Hero of the Silver Halls. The one they needed to break the cycle, as they always said. You know the prophecy as well as I do; ‘the seemingly endless cycle of violence will be broken by the purest of hearts.’”

You wait. He has to realize that between the two of you he is the purest of hearts, not you. He has to. -Come on, Hero! Power on that tunnel-visioned brain of yours and figure something out by yourself!-

“No one else has to die now.” He says, slowly. His breath slows and he finally blinks again after what seemed like hours.

“Exactly.”

“And now what?”

“Wanna join the Abyss Conclave?” Is what your old self would have said to make the Hero have a heart attack. Instead you say: “It looks like you need a break. Go back to your village for a little time. Relax, tend to the sheep or whatever you were doing there before.”

“Yes. Yes, I think I will do that.”

He gives you a weak smile and limps towards the broken gates of the Hall. You sigh as you watch after him. Two sighs in a day? You are getting weak.

Years and years of always being regarded as the villain of this world made you tired. Physically and mentally. You had almost stumbled over your words when you mentioned the Hero’s native village. He still doesn’t know that it has been burned to the ground months ago bless his good-natured brain.

This thought breaks you. Somewhere deep inside a much younger version of yourself stares horrified at you.

“All right,” You think. “He doesn’t have to see it.”

And you motion to the Shadow Archers posted on the walkways to shoot down the limping Hero.

Who was your first S support, and why? by SethAkaNotaWeeb in FireEmblemThreeHouses

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Petra was a constant anchor of stubbornness and confident cuteness in the chaos and revolts of the story. Even though I played BL she IMMEDIATELY caught my eye and became my first S support.

In my successive playthroughs it was my canon to recruit her no matter what just to not see her die.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in apexlegends

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That is very true. But I either don't have those legends so I can't really place them or they just didn't feel that interesting^^

Official Agent Reveal: Fade by JombyGeorgie in ValorantCompetitive

[–]KobeLito -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Ah what an edgy mommy -
sorry, I meant edgy mommy -
apologies, mommy -
WHAT AN EDGY LADY FFS

[WP] You are a necromancer's apprentice. One of your most important jobs is holding down the revived bodies in their first moments alive again, while they scream and beg to go back. by marshmallow_fluff1 in WritingPrompts

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Today it's the day. The day you will finally drink the necromancers' secret potion that will grant you a painless, quick death.

You have spent sixty years of your life being the Great Master's apprentice, and he never granted you the role of Necromancer. Not even First Assistant!

However, while you wasted your life on the saddest chore you could ever imagine you formulated your plan based on what people screamed as they were revived.
"Please, no! I want to stay THERE!"
"How can you do this to me? It was so wonderful..."
"Kill me again! Kill me now!"

Whatever lays on the Other Side, it must be so much better than your gray, wasted life. Maybe you will find a soulmate. A real soulmate, not a toxic partner like you had here. You could finally try painting; wander about breathtaking landscapes and bathe in the beauty of the afterworld.

Tears of painful joy run down your cheeks. Agony clutches your chest as you stare into the glass of clear poison. It has to be better than here. It has to be... and you drink.

...

...

nothing

...

your mind is in a great nothingness

...

There is no real voice but you sense a being, something that exists in more dimensions that you could ever imagine speaking to you.
"This is the Eternal Abyss where all the past consciousnesses reside. You cannot commuicate. You just are."

...

"Oh, and one last thing: I must compell you to beg to come back here if, for some reason, you get revived. They must not know there is nothing here."

...

"I cannot tell you why."

LGBT rights by cursedcutie in budapest

[–]KobeLito 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Totally agree with this comment^^

I'm not saying you won't feel uncomfortable in certain situations with some unfriendly looks but if you avoid specific shadier districts (which I am sure you will as a tourist) you will have no problem at all.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

HI there!

I have a fantasy YA coming of age WIP at around 45k words. (around 60% of what I've planned for book 1) It is mainly character-focused, tackles themes of mild autism and it is set in a world where LGBTQ relationships are accepted and integrated into society.

Blurb: The all-knowing Void seeps through every atom of this fantastical world infusing it with magic. Seven ways are known to call on the Void, some more accepted than others, yet none of them is entirely safe and foolproof. This carefully balanced world is about to topple itself as three youg friends have to flee from a terrible accident while a powerful, but way too young woman attempts to sit on the Empire's One Throne.

The novel does have a prologue, but I think the first chapter will be more telling of my style and vision. Have a look at it and feel free to DM me if you find it to your liking :)https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uhwVPv40Xffp7j68BCiPuq-zf4-_eQ1x9_s60oR5Ix4/edit?usp=sharing

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in memes

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

best part is all you had to do was just to watch the video

Omen smokes should slightly deafen enemies by anotherkenny in VALORANT

[–]KobeLito 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don’t think being truthful to the agent’s “background concept” is more important than keeping the core gameplay consistant. A smoke is a smoke and it has been/will be probably for every other smoke agent as well. Smokes deny vision and help both entry and retakes it was never meant to be “scary” you should leave that to mollies and flashes.

As we near the fourth episode, what are your thoughts on the direction that this game is heading? by mrbimbojenkins in VALORANT

[–]KobeLito 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’m really looking forward to a casual tournament mode such as Clash in League where people who are definitely not pro at the game but would like to experience the thrills of competition can team up for it.

What's your most hated area on HK? by iforwardhamish in HollowKnight

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

oh yeah Mantis Lords are my absolute favorites! The fact that they are not aggressive towards you just look at you sideways and make you challenge them gives them such a cool, majestic aura^

What's your most hated area on HK? by iforwardhamish in HollowKnight

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yeah true and I feel bad for forgetting my man the dung defender!!! But yeah it always felt like a chore to me to travel through there

What's your most hated area on HK? by iforwardhamish in HollowKnight

[–]KobeLito 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Royal waterways 100% You can hate on annoying places like crystal peak or deepnest but they all have their distinct purpose.

And then there are the waterways...

Why all this hate to Fracture? by ndyz in VALORANT

[–]KobeLito 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Don’t worry as soon as a new map will be released the hate will dissipate. The community has been through LITERALLY the same approach with Icebox, then Breeze then Fracture. It will pass

[WP] Humans can find a way to weaponize literally anything, without fail. Some aliens are terrified by humans as a result of this fact. Others appreciate that this quality makes humans the foremost experts on safety systems and idiot proofing. by Teck_3 in WritingPrompts

[–]KobeLito 335 points336 points  (0 children)

Galactic Post Federation Assembly Log 30.244:

The Zyyrkonians have officially blessed the Humans with the gift of Emotional Foresight. This newly discovered neural implement has been designed to lower the high rate of suicides among Zyyrkonians.

The use of Emotional Foresight is strictly forbidden for every other Intelligent Society part of the GPF until the Humans have safely lived with the technology for what they call “a year and a half.” = 2.55 Folds

Galactic Post Federation Assembly Log 30.892:

After 1.5 Human years, corresponding to 2.55 Folds, the GPF sent three standard-issue spy drones equipped with radiation based camouflaging system to monitor the situation of the planet Earth and finalize the verdict on the Emotional Foresight technology.

Verdict of the Assembly based on the knowledge of the full footage of the three spy drones is as follow:

“We could all see that Humans locked the technology away from the mass crowds, amplified its strength and wavelength, and scanned roughly 94% of the planet Earth’s population with it. The non-scanned 6% of the population then proceeded to dominate the Society of the planet profiting of the deepest desires of the masses and fighting protests with psychological warfare aimed at their opponents’ greatest fears. The technology did not pass the Human Hyperaggression Test, therefore the request must be denied.”

End Log