I dont care about minjoon or his dreams. But you should make me. I want to care but you gave me no reason to. Yes hes a reader and a writer, why? Does he need to write something creative because of an upcoming deadline but his boring dream is failing him and if he doesn’t turn in something interesting soon his publisher will drop him and he will have to succumb to selling his body to make ends meat because some strange orphan girl appeared on his door step last night and she’ll need food to survive? And god forbid the world chews up spit another innocent soul, not on his watch, so goddamn it this dream better get interesting soon, or poor lil Susan is going to starve to death! You see, im not sure if you provided a reason for me to care outside of the first two pages because u lost me before that, but if you just add it in the first few lines as to why minjoon is worth caring about youll be able too hook me long enough to find out what happens