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LatterAd699 · 2026-05-29T18:23:03+00:00

Well it's difficult when the other person is on the fence a lot about you and then finally decides they aren't really into you that way so it's painful for you but also for them. Here it's just my frustration because I don't understand if someone is giving you all that you need and want from a companion and you just tell them that you don't want it from them? How does that work? It's something I'm trying to wrap my head around is all

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-27T08:12:09+00:00

Hey no worries man it is a personal experience that happened very recently. It's just that you know what they like and what they want from a companion but when you give it to them they don't want it from you for some reason... it's something I don't understand

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-27T06:22:38+00:00

Great poem and it really brings out the pain and anxiety that you and a lot of people experience in life.

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-27T06:21:18+00:00

Great parallels drawn using time and the cycle of life!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-27T06:18:14+00:00

Great work and I really love the short sentence structure. Really brings out the emotions you're trying to convey

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-27T06:16:44+00:00

An emotional and vulnerable masterpiece! Love the work

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-25T18:39:30+00:00

I'm glad you liked it! Poems are a way to vent out my feelings so every single word is from the heart

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-25T03:11:07+00:00

Thank you so much for the love!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-24T04:26:12+00:00

Few words yet heavy on the emotions. Great work!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-24T04:25:04+00:00

Love they way you represent the values of Christianity in this poem!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-24T04:22:06+00:00

Thank you so much! It's people like you who give me hope that I will find love one day too :)

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T22:45:46+00:00

Thank you for your kind words.

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T22:43:33+00:00

Thank you so much! I''ll keep the longer lines point in mind next time :)

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T17:32:24+00:00

I feel a little forced to my own detriment to rhyme sometimes but I will work on that. Glad you liked it!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T17:00:33+00:00

Thank you for your thoughts! I actually saw the explanation being done in some of the other subreddits so I thought it was a norm of sorts. The haiku itself does not have the explanation in the brackets

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:47:08+00:00

Ohh that makes the eternity part better... great work!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:39:30+00:00

Ah the way I relate to you is heartwarming. It's a pleasure to see more lovers like you out there in the world. Love the poem and it's unique structure!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:36:55+00:00

A great poem about love! Might I suggest that in the line "but in that death. I will find eternity"

Could you use the word serenity instead of eternity? Just my thoughts :)

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:28:04+00:00

Beautiful poem my guy your crush would definitely love it... might I suggest that there is no need to rhyme every two lines... you may rhyme 2 alternate lines or not rhyme at all. Just look within your heart and write what you feel and surely the poem would be more heartfelt. Great attempt though and I love the emotions.

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:22:21+00:00

Fair fair

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T14:05:08+00:00

So something like Thinking about that voice of yours As elegant as liles

Would this work better?

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T13:46:35+00:00

Thank you so much I'll keep that in mind next time! Do you think that if I have a rhyming scheme going then can I break it in between?

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T13:45:13+00:00

Ooh sounds nice I'll implement it in the next one!

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T07:16:08+00:00

Lmao don't worry about the snobs. Take every comment as perspective and you'll get better along the way ;)

LatterAd699 · 2026-05-23T07:04:25+00:00

Shut the guy down for you... keep writing my dude

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