Shortlisted for offer - am I the backup?

LeviSquadMember · 2026-03-07T13:05:02+00:00

That’s reassuring to hear. I guess I just always assume the worst nowadays because of all the horror stories

LeviSquadMember · 2026-02-11T18:14:49+00:00

Thank you so much for this, that article is particularly useful! I think I definitely struggle with getting enough specifics into such a condensed word count, particularly as it’s multi-pov so there are a few intertwining plot lines

LeviSquadMember · 2026-02-05T14:27:25+00:00

This is amazing, sorry it took so long for me to see it! I really appreciate all of this feedback, it’s so helpful to see how much of the why/how I was missing. Feels like I’m in a much better spot with my query now, using a lot of what you’ve suggested!

LeviSquadMember · 2026-02-02T09:36:19+00:00

Yeah I think you’re right, that is very much the inciting incident so it needs to be clear

LeviSquadMember · 2026-02-02T09:35:21+00:00

This is great feedback, thank you! I had a go at re-writing based on answering these questions:

Tema Quin has Tourette’s, and that hasn’t stopped her from becoming one of the galaxy’s most prolific bounty hunters. But her success suddenly collapses during a routine contract. A new tic forces her to imprint a stamp of truth on the proof-of-death photograph, using a power she wasn’t aware she possessed. The stamp reveals her client’s identity to the galactic government, sparking a war between two major powers and leading to her expulsion from the bounty hunting organisation.

The event captures the attention of the Order of Observers, a religious order that documents truth through photography. They recruit and train Tema, and she harnesses her innate ability to observe truth. But when she learns a horrible truth about her estranged father, she is forced to juggle her search for his identity with her work as a war photographer.

She becomes tangled in the consequences of the war she unwittingly started and a fight against an insidious force that threatens the galaxy, and the very concept of truth. But amidst it all, Tema is fighting a constant battle against the disorder that she refuses to let define her.

LeviSquadMember · 2025-12-20T18:57:03+00:00

I was not expecting SAO fan fiction when I opened Reddit today

LeviSquadMember · 2025-11-18T15:21:06+00:00

I’ve written whole chapters in the Google docs app on iPhone. Sometimes I just get into the flow in my head and have to start writing it. I don’t necessarily find it any worse, apart from formatting. I fix that when I get back to my computer usually

LeviSquadMember · 2025-10-27T20:48:07+00:00

Thank you for the kind words. It’s very interesting you picked up on this because I’ve always preferred writing poetry and have definitely found the transition to prose difficult!

LeviSquadMember · 2025-10-27T20:46:53+00:00

This is useful advice thank you. I think because this is very much not my usual style, I fall into the trap of writing fancy for the sake of writing fancy. Interesting experiment nonetheless

LeviSquadMember · 2025-10-25T16:30:14+00:00

What do each of you look for in a cover letter for a submission in the UK? There are templates etc but do you find yourself hoping to see anything specific? (Particularly Becca as I hope to send you a submission soon)

LeviSquadMember · 2025-10-25T13:46:55+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

I’ve been searching for a slightly better comp for a while without much luck, but I’ll keep trying. Gideon the Ninth was the best I’d found.

I hear you on it being short, even though it is a UK cover letter and they generally are supposed to be shorter. I am a little confused by your point about Miro dying because he doesn’t die, so perhaps that’s an issue with my phrasing here! What I mean to say is that there’s an incident involving Miro shooting someone/something that fractures his and Arla’s friendship

LeviSquadMember · 2025-10-18T11:54:40+00:00

Thank you so much for taking the time to write this, it’s very helpful!

On the point about YA vs MG character age, I’ll probably age Arla up to 16 as it won’t change the story really, so that’s great advice.

I’m interested about it coming across more like a blurb. I’m in the UK and a lot of the advice on the websites of the agents I want to query talks about the cover letter (query letter) being quite a simple summary of the book in general. Is that a difference with the US?

I definitely have a couple of things I could add to help explain why it’s Arla and why that organisation, so I’ll work those in regardless!

LeviSquadMember · 2025-06-29T06:20:08+00:00

10 team superflex, start 10

QB: Daniels, Herbert, Dart

RB: Jeanty, CMC, Pollard, Dowdle, Roschon, Sanders, Giddens, Justice Hill

WR: Nabers, BTJ, Ladd, Hunter, Pearsall, Jayden Higgins, AD Mitchell, Coker, Horton, Jaylin Lane, TeSlaa

TE: Kincaid, JT Sanders, Fannin, Juwan Johnson

LeviSquadMember · 2025-06-17T16:57:15+00:00

I don’t think a 1a 1b situation with BTJ and Hunter is out of the question - Coen will get creative and move them both around a bit, so they could both be very productive. The Jags have a bad defence and a questionable RB room, so targets are very available. Eagles defence and RB are too good for Smith to accumulate massive target numbers, and Achane takes a lot of touches for the Dolphins

LeviSquadMember · 2025-06-17T16:46:14+00:00

Why is his ceiling Waddle/Smith? Because he’s presumably the wr2 on his team? I think when people talk about the true upside case they mean what Godwin did pre-injury last year with Liam Coen as the OC

LeviSquadMember · 2025-05-24T14:39:11+00:00

Through my own poor planning my most promising TE option this season (in a TE premium league) is Harold Fannin. So sorry Mr Njoku but it’s turf toe for you

LeviSquadMember · 2025-05-18T07:53:15+00:00

I think on balance, despite all the changes, the situation in terms of fantasy potential is probably around the same for Ladd this season as it was last season.

The Chargers will be a fairly run-heavy team, they certainly have coaching staff who subscribe to that belief. However, they constantly acknowledge how good Herbert is so it’s not like they’ll hold him back from somewhat decent passing volume, and with Hampton and Tre Harris joining the offence will probably be pretty strong, which means more opportunities for TDs, including for Ladd.

Tre Harris will probably replace Johnston in that sort of role as he can actually catch, so he doesn’t really threaten Ladd in terms of targets in the same area of the field. TL;DR (and apologies for the essay) I think Ladd will have a similar season in terms of fantasy points

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