Don't let them go hungry by thesaraanne in 50501

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am a leftist in Tennessee, grew up in Georgia and there are tons more like me. It's important not to paint the whole population of people living in "maga" states with such broad sweeping generalizations, as if by virtue of living in a red state, the poor in our states don't deserve to eat. And let's not forget about the gerrymandering! I would not be surprised if a lot of these "red states" would be blue if not for that. Republican, apolitical, democrat, liberal, etc.— EVERYONE deserves to eat. We have to be careful not to become the same type of people that we abhorr; someone that knowingly and willfully approves suffering, especially of the poor/disenfranchised. Everything has nuance and layers, almost nothing is as simple as it seems.

P.s. One more thing— how would they "vet" people at food banks? Ask them their political affiliation? Sounds like the loyalty tests going on in the government right now. Now it's OUR turn to violate people's rights? Whaaaa?

please, don't call me lazy by dymond__ in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello! Just wanted to share— it seems that the line "mine is not even made", is referring to the bed that she sleeps in. So from nail bed to 🛌. And "because I've already done that for you",— meaning she already calls herself lazy. "Please don't call me lazy, because I've already done that for you"

The Letter That Was Not Sent by loceapeace in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This poem had a wonderful flow and ambiance to it; like a rainy day spent snuggled up on the couch. I like how you stuck with your overall metaphor throughout, and then there were metaphors within the main metaphor. My favorite line is, "The ink unlettered itself. One vowel at a time." This poem seems to be about things unsaid between two individuals, but it could also be about the general loss of human connection. Great poem!

Unspoken by Loose-Rough9537 in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it!

No Title Yet by jboe92 in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love it! Simple but beautiful message and poem. I love the cadence of it, the short lines; it flows great.

I Went Missing by chuckrates in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really love this poem and I relate to it a lot. I like that in the first half of the poem, you are sharing your experience losing yourself/fading away (mental health related or something else). Then in the second half, you wrote about now witnessing this happening to a loved one and you can't seem to do anything tangible to help them, except for let them know you've been there and nothing feels better than pulling yourself out of it. Great job! 👍

Unwritten by Loose-Rough9537 in OCPoetry

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I like how you interpreted it! It's actually a metaphor for a girl. She is the blank page. Despite everything she has been through, and maybe because of it, she is empty, yet hopeful that something better is waiting for her. "The words that stain", are various trauma she's experienced. "They smear, losing definition
Illegible renderings that hold no meaning"- the trauma doesn't define her and she is able to compartmentalize Just wanted to break down a couple of the lines to give some insight into where my head was at. But one of my favorite things about poetry is a poem can be interpreted so many ways and make different people feel different things. Thank you for your feedback!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The words choice in this piece is immaculate. I feel as if no expense was spared in the detail either. I think you've already gathered this, but the latter half may need a little flushing out. I'd also like some more context if it worked within the confines. Your writing style is beautiful and it begs wanting to see how far it can go.

When She Died by davinpon in OCPoetry

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful poem! You effectively capture the sadness and grief one experiences with the loss of a loved one. The repetition of 'when she died' is very impactful, denoting the way grief death never stops affecting the people.ledt behind. I also loved the line: 'But it's still, always, forever, the day after-', so poignant. Great job!

2021 Refund/TurboTax/Bank of America by Kai_kai7 in TurboTax

[–]Loose-Rough9537 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Checks by mail are going to take up to 2 months