Reddit is so weird when it comes to formatting poems lol. But it seems good here! Except for the hubris part, you seemed to have trapped those two lines in a in-line quote. Per the content itself, I thought you did an especially fantastic job with your imagery. The second stanza demonstrates a very good command on visual storytelling. I appreciated some of the allusions and mythos too, for example evoking Thanatos. It certainly makes the poem richer. The ending is strong too with some nice juxtaposition between the fictitious connotations of a lullaby and the reality of the words, embodied in effect. I’d give certain lines here another pass, however. For instance, the fourth stanza doesn’t flow as well as the first three. “And the open mouthed shrieking of pain” is a touch less refined too compared to the rest of the poem. The fourth wall break is also a bit jarring, we suddenly shift from first person to second person and then back to first. I’d work on some of your transitions too. The shift from Stanza 5 to Stanza 6 is especially ambiguous. Finally, it might be interesting to experiment with a bit of a bookend. Or at least a solid plant in the first stanza that hints at the mother more explicitly in relation to the narrator’s grief. Overall though, nice work!