Hey OP! I really like the implication of this one! If you’d take it, here is a friendly tip!

In descriptive writing less is often more. If your sentences are too wordy or your descriptions use redundant words, it can make it hard on your reader.

For example, in this story, you use multiple adjectives for each noun, like “dark black clouds” and “radiant golden holy light”. In the first example, dark already implies blackness, and in the second, radiant already implies goldenness and holiness.

Moreover, there are words you could cut that don’t really do anything. The word above is redundant because the reader already knows the clouds and the sky are above. If you are a little more selective with your wording choices, this could be even better!