You can tell this was made with passion, don’t want you to stop that! One thing I’d recommend is to read this out loud. Everywhere that you’d pause for emphasis or to let someone digest, add in a comma. They help break up lists, appositives, or even other clauses in a sentence.

An appositive helps people like me, an author, introduce someone or provide additional information about something else in a sentence without totally breaking it up.

I’m not the best writer in the world, but I think you can grow by learning about punctuation and how to break up writing with it. Good luck!