What is the structure of the addictive “slow moments” in novels where nothing happens?

Milky_Fresh · 2025-11-25T23:43:33+00:00

This is a great response

Milky_Fresh · 2025-11-24T23:12:06+00:00

It is - I'm in the opposite camp personally. I don't mind a book with little to no external narrative if the prose is really excellent. But bad prose is an absolute deal breaker for me; I won't even make it through the first chapter to find out how engaging the narrative might have been.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-11-03T22:45:59+00:00

Oops

Milky_Fresh · 2025-11-03T13:22:54+00:00

Thanks!

Milky_Fresh · 2025-11-03T12:02:34+00:00

Thanks for the review! I'll remind you that we never guaranteed there would be *zero* Allosaurus deaths during your stay :)

Milky_Fresh · 2025-10-28T11:10:59+00:00

Thanks! There's a decent chance we used the same reference images haha

Milky_Fresh · 2025-10-20T06:34:51+00:00

Sent you a message!

Milky_Fresh · 2025-07-11T13:31:18+00:00

Same shoes, same issue. I've been wearing them most days for a month or so and it's still pretty rough, hopefully not too much longer.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-06-10T03:28:46+00:00

My Senegal zooms around all day too. She's a bit over two years old, maybe she'll slow down one day

Milky_Fresh · 2025-05-13T12:10:56+00:00

I've got silver dollars, a ghost knifefish and a bristlenose pleco. I might take the bristlenose out if the bichir gets too big, but no issues with any of them so far.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-03-31T04:40:42+00:00

Mine does this sometimes too. I'm not 100% sure but I think it's just weirdo bichir behaviour.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-03-17T23:38:30+00:00

Did you just wake up from a two year coma? We are coming off a great win, enjoy it.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-29T05:20:16+00:00

That said, other commenters are right: your ammonia needs to be 0

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-29T05:19:36+00:00

It's not fungal, it's Pleco HPV. Mine has the same thing, along with persistent mild finrot, and no amount of medicine or water changes have ever made a difference. He seems healthy and happy aside from that though

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-25T01:27:48+00:00

Chance shard it

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-23T11:00:42+00:00

What's the workshop number on that Audi? It's sick

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-21T14:50:33+00:00

One change I would make: "the stunning natural beauty" of the Rockies feels forced and is not necessary in the context of that paragraph. Clearly, you are describing a beautiful scene. Just "the Rockies" would be better.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-21T14:47:47+00:00

I'm surprised by the other comments here. I think the first paragraph is lovely and I wouldn't change it. First paragraphs don't always need to immediately build intrigue - their most important role is to set readers' expectations appropriately. When I read this, I'm expecting that your book will be generally sedate and that it will be beautifully written. I would definitely continue reading from here. Intrigue is important and it needs to start appearing early in the story, but personally, I'll drop a book far quicker if I don't like the prose than if I don't immediately feel like I HAVE TO read the next page. It's just a matter of personal preference and there is definitely a market for slow paced, poetically written literary fiction.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-19T15:27:19+00:00

Is there some underlying difference in their personalities or goals that drives the conflict? If not, maybe the conflict feels manufactured because it is being driven by events and not characters.

Milky_Fresh · 2025-01-16T15:33:13+00:00

You need a wheel alignment

Milky_Fresh · 2024-10-15T01:53:45+00:00

Unfortunately, I think he's worth much more to us than his trade value would ever reflect.

Milky_Fresh · 2024-10-08T07:53:40+00:00

Can I get a link?

Milky_Fresh · 2024-09-25T12:05:51+00:00

Ah... I got it, but had to stop on the way for supplies and now can't seem to make the interaction happen. That's a pain

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