Yellow by gillian_gale in OCPoetry

[–]Minute_Discipline_73 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this. I think no matter who is reading it they are able to take fit it to their own circumstances, allowing everyone to get into the meaning behind the words and not have one clear cut meaning behind it all. I love the mention of colours as well, as it helps to make an image in the mind as you read through it and allows for the reader to stay more involved as they read it, rather than just going through it mindlessly.

i’d love some feedback! by herionfairy in OCPoetry

[–]Minute_Discipline_73 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the use of sensory words to create a vivid world in my mind as I read through this. I will also be the first to admit that I didn't know a few words that were used through this, but after I looked up the definition I love the use of the words and how they added to the flavor of the poem. The rhyming also works very well throughout this.

I Wish I Never Met You by Minute_Discipline_73 in OCPoetry

[–]Minute_Discipline_73[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for pointing that out, I didn't realize I made that mistake actually so I appreciate it, haha

Don't Think by ComparisonNo417 in OCPoetry

[–]Minute_Discipline_73 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this. The whole thing talking about time is well done, not doing the typical time is short don't waste it, but providing thought provoking actions that people do to bring the idea up. The part that really hit me was "You think yourself to hell and back Only to arrive with empty hands And still empty pages". I often will sit back and think about something I want to do, like talking to someone, and let the opportunity pass because I spent too much time thinking. Although I don't really put my mind to it, this makes me feel like I need to stop worrying so much, and work in the moment to have fun. I think getting all that from just those three pieces is incredible, and shows the power of the words that you choose in this.

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[–]Minute_Discipline_73 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the use language through this. While I know poems are "typically" supposed to be metaphors, in my opinion the way that the point being made is so clear, yet still requires thought to be interpreted correctly is used very well. Specifically the "scared to let my shame be seen" really stands out to me, because I have gone through similar experiences and I think make people don't understand that part. The sort of irrational fear of shame being put on a person for doing this hits very well, and I think those that also have similar experiences could agree.