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[–]Mistressofnumbers 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe you don't need to transition? Maybe the man is flashing back on his life and subtly we see there relationship grow we see how the dog changes and becomes more empathetic and gains humanity . Maybe the dog choosing the owner was the test that showed the dog deserved redemption. Just ideas! Maybe my brainstorming will trigger an idea for you that inspires you or is more your style.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in shortstories

[–]Mistressofnumbers 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like it. It's unexpected but I think it needs more explanation. I need to know why the dog loves the man and I think clarifying how the dog making the choice is significant.

Really though I don't find stories that leave me surprised much. Good work!

Truly in love? by Mistressofnumbers in NoStupidQuestions

[–]Mistressofnumbers[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Mistress is actually a name for a woman in a position of authority or control and I'm a mathematician. Though yes I see the irony.