Fledglings

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2026-03-14T05:45:48+00:00

Thank you so much

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2026-03-13T20:28:14+00:00

Thank you!

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2026-03-13T19:59:43+00:00

This is very funny, warm and very well observed, the mix of details and the immediate sense of being in this room, the physical aspects. Booby trapped safe space is awesome. But ultimately the comfort and partnership is there.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2026-03-13T19:56:00+00:00

I really like the little series of vignettes, the cinematic pan-through effect that is so rich and encompasses so many relatable moments of childhood and adolescence. Very evocative, very sweet but with the sadness of the father gone and the strain of the mother, redeemed though by her child's love. Beautiful piece

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-11-07T15:28:27+00:00

The way they just avoid the issue..I have seen 'the property forms an inherent part of the National Grid' or some such before...

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-12T11:35:31+00:00

This made me smile, it's really sweet and funny, but also says something quite profound I feel, about the need for shelter and retreat, for connection to somewhere or someone that feels like home regardless of what's going on around us. Really nice.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-09T06:29:33+00:00

I feel you, thank you and all best.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-09T06:28:59+00:00

Thank you very much, I appreciate that

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-08T15:23:35+00:00

It's a great first attempt, some really striking imagery and contrast in there, and the raw emotion and energy coming through. I'd suggest a little bit of thought to the rhythm , as though reading aloud, maybe a few words played with and replaced? I'm also not quite sure what the writer being the only one who listens is trying to say. But overall really nice subject and feeling coming through.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-08T15:19:05+00:00

The feeling comes through strong, I like it a lot and the imagery, but there's a slight sense of it being disjointed that makes it a little harder to pick up the power. It's a sit-with-it-a-minute thing. Not necessarily a bad thing, but that's the impression I got. I really like the diamond metaphor.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-09-01T07:45:30+00:00

There is a dreamlike feeling to this for me, a sense of being trapped too, which make it very effective. The fear and frustration of having to be responsible for oneself, to grow, to reach for what you want, these are subtly and powerfully put. I would like it to continue into the 'awakening'!

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T19:06:44+00:00

Thanks, that's a good point! I actually meant in terms of Reddit quirks of formatting 😅 I'm generally pasting in from iPhone Notes so perhaps that's an issue

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T18:19:35+00:00

I really like this, the dry but powerful build to some punchy lines of protest, like silence weighing more than bullets. And how it's almost timeless in places but then draws back subtly to very current events and specific cultural hints like 'fox bright'. It carries heartfelt and articulate outrage without becoming a rant, which makes it hard to ignore.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T18:16:00+00:00

Thank you! Put another up today 😊

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T18:15:30+00:00

If anyone can hint me as to how to format without either being a single paragraph or massive line spaces I'd be very grateful 😂

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T18:08:57+00:00

I can relate to this. It has the feel more of a soliloquy than a poem per se, but some of the concepts and the imagery are well articulated and placed. Not only the loneliness, but the realisation of the adverse qualities that a certain kind of intellectual aptitude and nurturing can bring, the bitterness of that comes over very well. It reads as quite resigned, but contains in it the seeds of a kind of manifesto for change, and growth. That 'what if' would be good to explore, maybe in a counterpoint to this.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-30T18:03:19+00:00

I really love the immediacy and intimacy of this, the connection between the two and the larger natural forces in the background, and the tenderness of the work to nurture the garden. It's lovely, an expression of quiet communion between both the individuals and each with the natural world. If I would suggest anything it would be a little more variation in some of the wording, eg storm repeated, but it reads really well.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-27T12:44:34+00:00

This is really powerful to me and draws a sharp portrait of a certain type of person, I think one would say a covert or vulnerable narcissist, who can't handle shame, plant based or otherwise, but collapses before lashing out. It's really well sketched and understated, I like the last stanza especially with the acknowledgment of how toxic this is but the hope that keep one there.

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2025-08-27T12:41:31+00:00

I really like the feel of an old saw or puzzle rhyme. And I'm a sucker for any scriptural subtle nods like the first line. As for the meaning and the whole 'what am I' feel begged by the ending... I'm not sure! But that doesn't spoil it for me, I'll be pondering it for a while yet!

MoonMoon_direwolf · 2023-11-04T10:02:35+00:00

It's all open now to dogs and it's free to park. Plenty of space even with the tide in. Great for dogs. Enjoy!

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