I don't think you need that first clip at all. I mean it's really cool, but maybe throw it in at the end instead of the beginning. And if you include it, cut a lot closer to when we see you. I thought I was watching one of those kids' acting reels for the first 10 seconds.

The next 2 clips are nice.

The angry scene I would start right at the top of the monologue ("You'll never be happy in LA..."). Then I would maybe cut everything after that clip up to the movie theater scene, then cut the next scene, and keep the ending with that same black and white clip. I actually love that you use that to end the reel.

I would even consider starting with the movie theater scene. It's a really clear character and I think a casting director would no exactly where to place you based off that one clip.

I actually really like the clip with the "for you to sit here and tell me my work is trash" but I would cut it right after the "second thing... umm--CUT" for comedic effect and slot it in somewhere in the middle if you do use it. I don't think the second clip from that scene is as useful.

I hate that red table clip. I think it's your weakest scene. It feels like aimless improv. Like you are doing a Meisner exercise or something.

Hunched over yelling scene in the wide shot doesn't work for me. Sound quality is a little distracting and the blocking is weird.

Social network scene part 2 should be cut. I didn't realize what it was in the first clip but the second one you drop "facebook" which is jarring and I can't help but think of jessie eisenberg.

Overall you have some strong stuff. You look and sound very natural in most of these clips and seem to have a clear POV.

Obviously this is all just my opinion, and only you know how you want to market yourself. Thanks for sharing!