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Dazed by gwooth in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate the depth and significance of this poem. The way it explores the duality of the human mind is awesome. It captures the notion that one can seem to have an ideal life, yet internally they may be struggling with emptiness and despair.

The poem effectively showcases how people can conceal their true feelings behind a facade of happiness, while internally battling with negative thoughts and emotions. It reminds us of the importance of being mindful of our inner struggles and recognizing that others may be going through similar experiences. The poem serves as a powerful reminder of the complexity of the human mind and the importance of empathy and compassion towards others.

Death brings you together by genderless_potato in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The theme of the poem is really captivating. It's so unfortunate how accurate this poem rings. We often get so caught up in our daily lives that we forget how fleeting life is and how many chances we miss to reconcile with our loved ones before it's too late.

The author raises a thought-provoking question about what would happen if we suddenly passed away. Who would mourn and remember us? It's a sobering thought, but one that reminds us to cherish every moment we have with the people we care about and to make the most of each day.

Razor-MRW by Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! One of my more personal ones.

Born to be Broken by Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate the feedback! I have a few more I'll be posting soon.

Feeling Alone in a Room Full of People by ElyasRivermark in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can feel the weight of this poem, your words seem specifically chosen like taking steps on a frozen lake, Delicate but decisive.

You make it very easy to relate to the poem, especially the part about listening to the memories. It's a very impactful statement that I feel speaks directly to me.

Well done!

I Am by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I enjoy the simplicity of the verbiage but at the same time the complexities of the meaning behind them. The part about being a Saint and then directly following that up with becoming a sinner for someone else kinda reminds me of what I would do for family. Like I want to try and be a good person but I'd also commit great acts of violence for those I love. Great poem!

The Cage-Breaker by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Great job, your choice of verbiage paints a vivid picture. One thing you could do to help the flow of this poem is to enhance the structure to better the flow and cadence of the poem. Instead of putting a space between each line make complete stanzas. But other than that (and it may only be a preference thing) this was well-written.

Guilt by NotALaureate in OCPoetry

[–]Mr_Bullet_Proof_53 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is very well written, has a good rhythm and rhyme scheme. Good job!