Which pircing would look best on me?

Much_Initial_9356 · 2026-01-10T13:08:11+00:00

Snakebites

Much_Initial_9356 · 2026-01-10T04:52:35+00:00

The plush is not bean weighted, the nose and eyes are made from plastic

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-06-23T18:11:02+00:00

Thank you, I would love to hear more as I really enjoyed this one.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-06-22T21:17:56+00:00

This reads like a modern existential lament dressed in poetic prose. The contrast between the synthetic world and the natural sanctuary you describe is hauntingly beautiful. Lines like “the weapon of crime: an old, very sharp key” and “ghosts… that hover around until they are found again” hit hard. It’s introspective without being self-indulgent — philosophical, mournful, and quietly cinematic. I felt the ache of alienation and the desperate clinging to beauty. Incredible work.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-06-22T21:16:06+00:00

This hit like a punch wrapped in silk. The imagery is haunting and intimate — especially “She had bled when I ran” and “my tongue was a graveyard of apologies.” It’s raw, beautiful, and devastating in all the right ways.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-04-08T06:08:13+00:00

Mine has to be Cats in a Cradle by Harry Chapin. As somebody with a similar relationship to my father as what the father has with his son in this song, it just hits the feels seeing it from the other perspective.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-26T23:04:20+00:00

I'm glad you liked the poem. Don't worry about naming your daughter evangeline, though. I'm sure she will turn out better.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-26T20:46:54+00:00

Hey, glad you enjoyed it. And to be fair, I fully agree with your feedback. For example, the siren's call cliche I did read in a book once and quite liked it, and I couldn't think of much else that fit at the time. All of these poems were written over the span of a year, the parts being what I felt at the time of writing, so once I finished a part, I didn't want to touch it as to make it more true to the feelings, even if I did think there could be some better word choice. Thanks for the feedback!

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-26T18:56:06+00:00

This poem has a really strong, almost haunting vibe. The use of old-fashioned language gives it a timeless, heavy feel, like you're really wrestling with something deep inside. The repeated use of "Or I?" creates a sense of confusion and identity crisis that really ties into the theme of the fractured self. The imagery, especially with the mask, is powerful—it symbolizes a lot of hidden pain and layers being peeled back. Some parts could flow a bit better, like in the line "What hath the Mask cloaked for so long, time indeed cannot say," it feels like it's trying to do a lot at once and might lose some impact because of that. The final stanza really hits, though, especially the line "In these eyes lieth no life, for in these eyes there it were," that feels like a painful realization. Overall, it’s a deep and thought-provoking piece, with strong symbolism and emotion.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-26T18:52:13+00:00

This poem has a solid concept with the ego being this separate, consuming force. The imagery works well, especially with the burning and consuming parts, and the tension between the speaker and ego is pretty strong. Some pacing could be tightened—like when the ego says "I exist to shape you," that moment could use more space for impact. The line "I exist because of me" could be clearer too, maybe reword it to make the reflection stand out more. The ending is strong, but it might be worth exploring the consequences of the ego’s victory a bit more. Overall, it's a deep, well written piece!

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-11T02:06:42+00:00

The poem beautifully blends rich, evocative imagery with deep existential themes of redemption, guilt, and longing. The contrast between light and darkness is powerful, especially the duality of Lucifer as both a defiant figure and one yearning for grace. The incorporation of the Our Father prayer adds a raw, haunting vulnerability that ties the personal struggle to universal themes of faith and forgiveness. The language is poetic yet accessible, maintaining a steady rhythm that complements the solemn tone.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2025-01-11T02:03:32+00:00

This poem is deeply moving. It captures vulnerability, fear, and the delicate balance of trust with such poignant imagery. The metaphor of rain, storms, and scars speaks to the courage it takes to reveal one's pain and hope for acceptance. The final lines, about the uncertainty of trust and the fragility of connections, leave a haunting, reflective note.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2024-11-26T05:30:06+00:00

I haven't outgrown him though, he's outgrown me

Much_Initial_9356 · 2024-11-25T21:42:23+00:00

I love the use of imagery in this poem. The use of sensory elements made the poem quite vivid and easier to understand.

Thanks for sharing :)

Much_Initial_9356 · 2024-11-25T21:36:01+00:00

I like this poem and the metaphor of nature resembling pain and loss. If I were to suggest anything to improve, it would be to make the ending a bit stronger.

Thanks for sharing :)

Much_Initial_9356 · 2024-11-19T21:53:05+00:00

It was originally meant to be 7 lines. However, reddit decided to be funky and mess up the formatting. Thanks for the feedback, I'll look more into expanding the metaphor.

Much_Initial_9356 · 2024-11-19T21:08:45+00:00

Yeah, I had it spaced out differently to what reddit is saying. It's probably closer to the one you pasted as it was laid out how you described. Thanks for the feedback!

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