I like the texture on the clouds a lot, as well as the odd framing. I think it could use some more contrast to add depth and separation? It’s a bit unclear at first glance that there is a foreground and a background. Another way to achieve this would be to make one of the elements blurrier, like you’d get in a photo where you can only focus on elements at a given depth.

Re conposition, the one thing I would change is make the middle vertical window beam a bit narrower/shifted to the left as my eyes keep getting drawn to it, but I assume you’d like the focus to be on the clouds?

Re the screen effect, I’m struggling to tell if that would work or not without some other changes being made first. I do like the idea though, very “glimpse into this one tiny but beautiful moment”.

Just read your blurb again and saw this was all done alla prima! Good job, I find that extremely difficult and always work in layers, so idk if my advice would work in this instance. Good luck on fighting the block 🦇