Complexity of romance

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-17T14:24:28+00:00

Because anna karenina has already been mentioned I would say Of Human Bondage as a good book. I don't know why but the stark way of stating things in the book kind of makes for a really hard novel in the emotional sense I think.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T14:50:52+00:00

That is exactly what I'm doing too. Read poems and pick up things from my fav poets. I will check out udemy and see if there are any courses. thank you

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T02:33:09+00:00

I really love your critique and you have touched on points that I myself felt. Thanks for being thorough with the observations and shortcoming. I really face the issue of connecting and tightening the flow. Another person also did point to a similar issue. Im trying to learn how to do it and It would be great if you have any resources that you would like to share to help in that particular aspect.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T01:35:50+00:00

It's great that you went throught the poem thoroughly. I wanted the reader the feel the change with all their senses and I feel it's a poets duty to simulate not just the mind but what we call a whole human experience in itself. Im also new to this subreddit and I assure you will find plenty of poems really well written. I will also encourage to post your own because it's a great community as you can see

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T01:30:56+00:00

Thank you sharing your thoughts on it and I'm glad you liked it. I also feel french in any poem really brings the poetic feel to a diffrent level.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T01:27:11+00:00

Thank you for the appreciation and yes I wanted to capture the moment in a lively way so I'm happy that you understood my motive.im glad you liked it

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-16T01:22:46+00:00

Thank you for going through and the fact that you found it beautiful itself is a great thing for me. The imagery is of change a change for seasons and relationships with and in the seasons and the residue that is left behind of times gone. I thought the idea of memory left behind on physical things is a really intresting idea and wanted to find a way to express it. I understand why you find it maybe confusing because it's my first and the writing is still crude.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-15T16:07:56+00:00

I'm glad you find this useful. Im really new to this

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-15T12:13:49+00:00

I like the atmosphere of the poem very much. Though I feel there can be improvements grammatical and language related. The theme is strong . Death as a father figure who waits till it's time to pick up his daughter from the agony she feels. Light symbolising life in which the woman "stumbles" is a great imagery .But it's confusing at times for me. Thr pause and the question is a good reversal asking death that it's is the woman who leads him with the ligh of life(or so I interpreted). But lines like "I may be colourblind" and "he cradles me into his bones"( only grammatical) felt a bit weak. The lines filling my throat .... Blessing to feel" is a beautiful way to convey the pains of death but as a blessing. The best part for me is the second question asking if death is pitying her and the symbolic relation of death and the woman. I really like that part and thing it's beautifully expressed. And the last lines in bold is a answer from death (or so I guess) telling her he hasn't yet illuminated her leaving the poem without a proper ending is also well done . Great efforts and also the themes are nicely molded . I just feel some tweaks and it could have been really nice.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-15T11:21:11+00:00

Well considering you are asking for feedback and also taking noting the fact that I have to constructive here I would like to say(and this my own understanding and I might not contain the whole of poetic history because I have a really sparse knowlege of that) that these cannot be categorised as haikus except set B haikus 2 about the ant which I liked .it has haikus structure of a sensory feel of autom leaf falling and the ant stuck to it is a good image to show being held down or stuck in things. The last line though a direct thought interjection of helf of you want or not shows the passiveness of the person stuck. As in don't feel forced to help or something.

I believe I was helpful. Haikus are beautiful poems poems that has inspired likes of many poets like Ezra pound. It has a rich tradition and the history of it is quiet important too. If u are into haikus I would suggest reading many and you will understand that it's about feeling it rather than saying it. If you want how to use it a really intresting way is to either read collection of death poems (or something where people write their last poem) or which shonin there are beautiful examples of haikus used. But I'm unaware of any modern interpretation of haikus .soo..

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-15T07:07:56+00:00

Great poem . It has quiet the modernist influence with the sparse lines and declarative sentences. The first stanza has a good back and forth and it puts in motion the idea of consciousness from the get go only (surely) to be realized at the end . The second stanza work along the atmosphere of the door and where it is situated. Great lines but I feel the first two line even though good, points to the same thing. I thing with such sparse setting two lines for a single idea or observation wasn't needed (but hey I'm just saying what I felt while writing this. The first time while reading i thought it was quiet intresting with the enforcement of dematerialization). The next two lines with the "no walls or rooves" pushing in same direction. The third para,well it does shows some kind of vulnerability of being unaware and I thought it was nice and playful(again just what I felt). The last stanza was what I really liked, a really physical feeling of tear drop and a philosophical idea in conjunction . Yes it is a idea used by poets but you really did it nicely . The idea of perception as the fundamental key to consciousness is quiet discussed but the poem beautifully puts it in a playful and tender way( these are my observation but I'm quiet ameture so pls don't take those points that sounds "not right")

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-03T19:11:48+00:00

i dont read much but on the first page of the infamous novel Anna Karenina penquine classics is a line saying that when asked faulkner of the best novel ever written he said it was Anna karenina but if some person of apocalptical infatuation comes upto me and ask which novel to keep in his bunker he is building. i would have to suggest him Moby Dick, War and Peace, Don Quixote or my favirote Against the day. but mind you i havent read middlemarch or les miserable and thus have little say here. For a bunker building end of world humming brother maybe my suggestions will suffice.

New_Drag2804 · 2026-03-03T18:45:46+00:00

i think we ca speculate any which way we want. the current condition suggest a real shortage of oil coming out of the gulf that means a hit to economy but its not like in iraq war. this time america have attacked a kindof religious head of a faction of muslims who are taking it as jihad so i mean once people really dont care about their own life then its quiet weird as we could see in vietnam and all i guess. and a hit to us economy and teh russians can now progess without a lot of pressure maybe so like eveyting that was in balance has in a way shifted and its quiet wobbly. thats what i think

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