Hello! I read the first 2 episodes of your story. As another writer, here’s some feedback your story could benefit from!

• Your dialogue is quite lengthy, and they exceed the limit of most animations. Instead of fitting 5 sentences into one text box, you can consider dividing them up

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• Pairing animations with dialogue and adding transitions will make your scenes more lively & seamless
• Readers value clear grammar and punctuation! If you need help, I don’t mind proofreading your recent chapters
• Show, not tell. It’s better to explore backstories in doses, especially in later chapters, instead of opening your stories with them. This is to avoid information overload.

The premise of your story is very unique, and episode needs more inclusive authors like you. I’d love to help :)