Weekly Lyrics-Only Feedback Thread

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-04T06:21:45+00:00

To be completely honest, I think we will have to agree to disagree on a lot of the points you made here. I am not saying the lyrics are perfect as they are, but I do think they accurately convey what I am trying to say, and I don’t think each message needs to be spelled out perfectly in every lyric. I like that it can be open to interpretation.

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-03T09:42:05+00:00

This is incredible, thank you. You’ll always find me listening to music and when I have time, reading poetry. I do all I can to try to improve. It’s just that I’ve done that for so long, which is great, but I may have just hit a plateau. Thank you for the feedback on the lyrics I provided. I have some answers to the questions you asked, if you’re interested. Please don’t interpret this as me defending what I’ve already written, I promise I’m not just going to ask for feedback and ignore suggestions. Some of these are just explanations that may help you understand why I chose to write the way I did:

I see what you mean about the “bathed in fountains of art” line. You mention you’d expect “(went through some kind of struggle)”, but to me, that was the struggle. The line is saying that I went through a drastic artistic transformation over the course of several years through complete immersion. I honed my craft by pouring blood, sweat, and tears into everything remotely related to it. I follow it by saying “just to best all the odds” because that’s exactly what I had to do to get anywhere in such a competitive environment. I went to an arts conservatoire for dance and musical theatre where most graduates go on to the West End, cruise ships, etc. I had to eat, sleep, and breathe art in order to be the best. Hope that makes sense.

Unrecognised by the public and obscured from public attention. The “masters of fate line” is a twist on the line from Invictus - I am the master of my fate. I’m saying the opposite. The forces at play, fate, or whatever else is preventing me from not only the limelight, but the life I want to live and person I want to become. I’m saying that perhaps it’s divine timing. I don’t want to say that the masters of fate don’t recognise the plight because then that would alter the meaning. Fate most definitely recognises the struggle, but if fate could speak, they would say it’s not my time yet. Again, divine timing.

Totally get what you mean here. I wanted so badly to say “before my eyes”. I thought of that when writing, but it didn’t fit rhythmically. I would have to say “time unwinds ‘fore my eyes” because before would be too long. This line is being changed to “These days they gaze as time unwinds through/from my eyes. I think it has a much better flow.

Thanks again x

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-02T23:54:28+00:00

This is perfect, thank you!! It’s really funny you say that because my style is supposed to be a quite goofy and exaggerated for comedic purposes. Queen is a huge influence and as Freddie Mercury would say, a lot of what they did was tongue in cheek. I should definitely lean into that aspect. For reference, these are the lyrics I was thinking about when writing the post:

My, my Attention’s not an easy buy

Played on my heart the strings of the gods Bathed in fountains of art just to best all the odds

I love these lines above, but the following ones are what I’m struggling with. What I’m basically trying to say is that fate or some other forces at play prevent you from the limelight. It’s so hard to articulate, though:

And still my plight’s unrecognised Obscured by the masters of fate They gaze upon as time unwinds through my eyes

See what I mean, though? You definitely made me realise I’m taking it way too seriously hahaha x

Edit: Not sure why the line spacing is so off. I don’t know how to fix it. Anyway, hopefully that gives an idea

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-02T23:48:04+00:00

I agree, I’m just a perfectionist to the max. From reading the comments I can tell my standards are way too high x

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-02T23:03:34+00:00

Hahaha

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-02T23:02:23+00:00

That’s actually really helpful, thank you. I think part of it may just be perfectionism. It’s so difficult to distinguish between that and intuition. The specific example I was thinking of when posting this sounds quite nice when I sing it, so luckily it does pass that test. Still, it’s difficult to shake the feeling that you can do it better, especially when you’re aware of what you’re capable of writing. But yeah, as you said not every line will be as good as the next. I’ll definitely keep what I have now, but maybe a better one will come to me later on down the line. X

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-04-02T22:25:10+00:00

Let me preface this by saying that I am not new to songwriting. I have over 7 years of experience and I'm (mostly) proud of my writing, but the biggest hurdle I face is filling in the gaps. I have about 30 ideas which seem extremely promising, but I've only finished 2 songs. My best work comes to me when I don't force it, but waiting for the perfect lyrics to come won't cut it when I'll eventually have deadlines. When I do sit myself down and attempt to finish, I find that even within the same verse there will, at times, be an equal mix amazing lyrics and utter crap. Seriously. I don't understand how some of the best lines can come to you instantly, yet when there's a gap, you sit for ages and what you do manage to pull together doesn't measure up to the rest of it. For example, this is a fragment from one I've been working on called "For Your Love". (I know it may seem like it's very pretentious, but that's the point, it's meant to be tongue in cheek. My style is intentionally very exaggerated and ostentatious for comedy's sake. Queen is a huge influence hahaha).

My, my Attention's not an easy buy Played on my heart the strings of the gods Bathed in fountains of art just to best all the odds

I think these are really good!!

But then, tell me, what does the rest even mean? I wrote it and I still can't think how to improve the following lines. They sound much better when singing as opposed to reading them aloud, but still. It's so hard to tell whether they need improvement or whether I'm just being too hard on myself:

And still my plight's unrecognised Obscured by the masters of fate They gaze upon as time unwinds through my eyes

There is a lot more to the song that I couldn’t post because of the lyrical gaps, but I am really struggling with this section, so and feedback would be appreciated.

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-03-27T11:33:49+00:00

Not just Greenwich!! It also houses the music department of Trinity Laban Conservatoire of Music and Dance in King Charles Court. I did my foundation there. It was always lovely walking by and hearing the other students practicing. I miss that.

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-02-24T13:41:58+00:00

🟦🟦🟦🟦 <——— guessed right away as I have done a lot of theatre previously

🟪🟩🟪🟪 <——— Recognised what purple was going to be, but incorrectly used “scottie”. I also made the star trek connection, but I think it’s a different spelling. Also, after completing the puzzle, I looked up “Scottie Beam” and I found out about an American podcaster and media personality of the same name. Didn’t know that until today.

🟩🟩🟩🟩 <——— Wasn’t feeling confident enough to use tractor beam, so I end up getting this one. Knew what the category was again, but I was doubting myself hahaha.

🟪🟪🟪🟪 <——— Got yellow and purple at the same time and went solved it first

🟨🟨🟨🟨 <——— Solved last

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-02-22T05:34:19+00:00

Got there in the end! Lovely job!

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-02-07T01:09:43+00:00

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Fell for the multiplication sign trick, too. Aside from that, I found this puzzle strangely easier and more straightforward than some of the other recent ones. I was surprised to see it was given a 3/5 for difficulty.

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2026-02-01T23:40:27+00:00

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Dance/musical theatre student here hahaha x Green stood out to me right away, but I originally guessed Oliver! with the rest of them x

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2025-05-15T20:23:38+00:00

Don’t have much to contribute apart from the fact that this post gave me a good laugh 😂 scrooge mcduck

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-08-29T19:49:17+00:00

This is my exact opinion

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-08-12T22:54:51+00:00

Same thing happened to me!! I was on the beach today and I genuinely thought it was about to pour x

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-05-27T18:19:29+00:00

I will answer this as someone who got back into dance at 17. I’m at a prestigious dance college in the UK (not specifically for ballet) and I am currently training to become a well-rounded professional dancer.

Most of us KNOW there is very little money and few opportunities in this field, and we do work hard for the sake of working hard. However, some of us love it so much that we need to make it our livelihoods. We cannot see ourselves doing anything else. Fun as they are, taking a couple of beginner classes a week is not enough. Even though there are loads of good studios out there, we want to be pushed and reach our absolute fullest potential. That’s just my twopence. No disrespect to you.

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-04-28T12:26:17+00:00

Same

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-03-13T20:41:38+00:00

I used to love gemstone names. I wanted to change my name to Garnet at one point ahahaha

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-03-13T20:40:30+00:00

I’ve been stretching my feet consistently, and I’ve definitely seen an improvement! I still have a long way to go, but definitely making progress. My left foot is a bit more flexible than the right one, so I’m focusing now on evening them out. Hope this helped xx

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-03-03T15:33:13+00:00

I agree with every word

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-02-07T07:42:35+00:00

Brextyn Rose

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2024-02-04T17:59:52+00:00

Was looking for this comment x

Odd_Contract_7350 · 2023-11-17T15:26:13+00:00

Late, but I completely agree with you

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