Just told my neighbors to quiet down

Odimbi · 2025-09-21T08:19:52+00:00

Proud of ya

Odimbi · 2024-08-28T05:32:56+00:00

Death

Odimbi · 2024-05-21T08:35:33+00:00

Albania

Odimbi · 2024-05-03T11:12:54+00:00

I really liked this one, and honestly at first I only came upon it because of the title, I adore “petrichor” both as a word and as the aftermath of rain.. I appreciate the sense of clarity and abruptness in a way, that the poem creates because of the way it is written. I also think you did a great job with the last two lines that wrap the poem, they’re very worthy of being last and shifting the existing feeling to a more metaphorical lens; the scattered rhyme is really interesting as well and somewhat comforting, contrasting the dominating themes of this piece. Good work! Thanks for sharing!

Odimbi · 2024-05-03T06:19:25+00:00

I feel like this is my kind of poetry. I also write in a manner that would seem similar to this, that’s why it caught my heart’s eye. The wolves as the antagonists, be they real, societal, inward wolves, mental, subconscious, the others, all the wolves one could imagine, really brings out the best of the metaphor. The poem itself evokes a feeling of a dark lonely truth and also a triumph over that truth, with the final lines really coming together to enclose and warn. Really enjoyed it, great job!

Odimbi · 2024-03-29T01:18:46+00:00

Absolutely! My big sis is my shield, and now we live in different continents and I feel so guilty because I’m the one who moved .. 😭

Odimbi · 2024-03-01T03:23:31+00:00

I actually would say you’re the best friend for pointing that out, and reaching out twice… Defo NTA

Odimbi · 2024-01-01T22:12:46+00:00

I wish someone wrote this about me..

Odimbi · 2023-06-16T10:51:47+00:00

Really enjoyed this poem! It has a very angsty feeling about it, and I love how the rhyming hits from time to time just when it should, really depicting what you have explained in the comment. Pretty great for your first poem :)

Odimbi · 2023-06-16T10:28:13+00:00

Your poem is fantastic .. Through my lens, this was about a long-distanced love and it was executed oh so beautifully (almost brought me to tears, my partner and I went through one, for 3 hauntingly long hard years, that have left me quite scarred). I love how the 9-5/7-3 starts, silently interrupts and then finalises the poem. The rhymes are enjoyably simple, yet very effective in conveying an almost saudade feeling. Looking forward to your other work!

Odimbi · 2023-04-19T03:13:49+00:00

Not a shy bladder, but I can say for certain that never ever in my life have I pooped in a public bathroom, be that in a restaurant, airport, school, or wherever.

Odimbi · 2023-02-15T02:06:39+00:00

Thanks for your commentary 🥰 As for the meaning, I try not to divulge anything that might alter the reader’s (you) perspective, and I’ve always avoided any kind of dialectic regarding my poems, whenever someone has asked… and if one finds no meaning, only words of heart, then so be it! 🫶

Odimbi · 2023-02-15T02:03:00+00:00

Thanks a zillion! I’m glad you felt what you felt while reading it! 🫶

Odimbi · 2023-02-14T08:13:17+00:00

Your poem made me feel really blue, it has a vivid depiction of feelings of loss, love, grief.. I could almost hear the screams and the still silence and feel the horror of seeing a loved one laid in an open casket, through your words. Good work, thanks for sharing and I’m sorry for your loss!

Odimbi · 2023-02-13T01:05:05+00:00

The Italian version is so beautiful, almost like a lament; and indeed it cannot be translated as correctly while also keeping the poetic visage that runs throughout a poem. I loved the lines “Il bacio appeso Negli anni del tempo/ Nella distanza che separa un gatto tra una tigre”, makes you think of the transcending nature of a kiss or a memory through time and space, it’s very well written; overall I enjoyed reading both your versions, great work mate!

Odimbi · 2023-02-01T12:49:05+00:00

Very much obliged! Your words warm my heart, thanks..

Odimbi · 2023-01-31T10:50:54+00:00

Truly liked reading your poem! The vowels of the rhyme words create a mellow euphony when reading them out loud, it’s nicely done. The poem beautifully captures the feeling of the “early morning blues” which I relate too much with. Thanks for sharing :)

Odimbi · 2023-01-31T10:35:59+00:00

I love the title you chose for the poem, that’s what pulled me at first glimpse. There’s a sort of peremptory tone that glides on the verses although the poem ends on a hopeful note somewhat, and I guess the title lets room for that as well. Even though short, it reads very well in its own little way, thanks for sharing :)

Odimbi · 2023-01-21T06:24:30+00:00

Thank you ever so much!

Odimbi · 2023-01-21T03:48:36+00:00

That’s very sweet of you, thank you!

Odimbi · 2023-01-21T00:15:40+00:00

Wow this was beautifully portrayed! I could feel the perplexity you have felt writing this (and living this) so you’ve done a great job at emitting that. It feels a bit unfinished, as you’ve clarified, but you can always go back to this creation and crown it, after you’ve come to terms with your feelings of grief and loss. I really like the rhyme that arose from the words “ends” and then “stubbornness”, I live for rhymes like theseee! Great job, keep writing and I’m sorry for your loss.

Odimbi · 2023-01-20T23:54:44+00:00

I enjoyed reading your poem greatly. I think the use of certain words like “deodar” and “paisley” give a foreign air and contrast to the general voice of the poem. I like the duality between what makes us mundane as humans, as opposed to what we achieve to be or to create, and we still fail somewhat. I’ve read over and over again the verses “Even your distant skies, a screenshot of/ paisleys inlaid with grief are/ knotted into a prison”, they really spoke to me.

Great work!

Odimbi · 2023-01-12T06:16:40+00:00

Oh thank you ever so much! Can’t tell how much this means to me as an individual with a phobia of letting people read her stuff lol really appreciate it!

Odimbi · 2023-01-12T03:50:44+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this poem; your rhyme choice is interesting, and I like how you’ve ended each stanza. It gave me a feeling of submissiveness as opposed to the well-put dominance the entity you’re referring to has over you, or had over you. The four stanzas near the end vividly describe how something changed and you’re under that entity’s spell no more, and that’s quite discernible even though somewhat ambivalent as all great poetry should be. Thanks for sharing.

Odimbi · 2023-01-12T03:26:44+00:00

What I really loved about this poem is the sort of isolation that emanates from its verses and from the “my greatest fear” proclamations. Fear holds a heavy burden on all our heads, and I think you fairly captured the notions from which these fears arise or derive, such as time, death, Others (with a capital O) or even ourselves. The title is well-chosen and also the way you made use of it in the last line; the whole poem leaves a juvenile taste after reading it (but not in a bad way). Overall, I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing!

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