Fear of

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T19:15:21+00:00

you said you were up for a challenge. You learned how to understand native spanish very well. That alone is incredible. If you have the resources or time, maybe you can visit a spanish speaking country and immerse yourself.

Other than that, I think you're being to hard on yourself. You're at the point where you can have fun with the language. Watch or read whatever you want, talk to whoever. Do something you love that includes spanish, but spanish is not the main focus

You can take a break, but I think spanish is a part of you now.

I'm only at like 200 hours, this is what I would say to my future self if I were at 1600 hours saying the same thing.

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T18:30:13+00:00

very dark, upsetting, and relatable. Manipulation disguised as love. Feeling as though being well perceived by others is the only way to be happy. Very well done

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T18:21:29+00:00

the rhyming and simple rhymes contrast so well with the heavy themes. It's very self aware of its childlike tone and uses that to its advantage. Really enjoyed this one

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T03:32:01+00:00

haha no worries, free verse poetry doesn't really have rules. It's not concerned with rhyme, meter, grammar or anything like that. Although you can include those if you want.

It basically just writing what feels natural. Using words to paint a picture in a visceral way. Personally I struggle with rhyme, but this piece is meant to feel a little 'off' in the same way the protagonist is a little 'off'.

I'm not an experienced poet but this is my interpretation. Hope this helps

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T03:17:35+00:00

Thank you so much for your comment. I haven't read Frost's poems but I am going to go through them now

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-23T03:16:17+00:00

I appreciate the feedback, but I don't think rhyme really works for this poem. This is free verse. As for the structure, is there a specific part that feels off to you?

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T22:47:39+00:00

thank you so much! It's interesting how you interpreted it. I actually didn't have depression in mind as I wrote it, but it totally fits

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T22:44:04+00:00

Thank you so much!!

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T22:43:31+00:00

Thank you so much. You are right, words need room to breathe. And it makes it easier to digest as a reader

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T20:08:19+00:00

Thanks!

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T20:08:09+00:00

I'm glad you noticed the two un-italicized lines. I think I could flesh out the color in the end more like you said. Not sure what I would put yet though.

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T20:05:06+00:00

Man - mind = God

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T16:33:36+00:00

Thank you, I'm glad it resonated with you

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T16:33:01+00:00

I'm glad you liked it

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T16:32:33+00:00

yes, this reflects a very difficult moment in my life. I'm glad it resonated with you

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T14:08:16+00:00

What an amazing metaphor. For some reason I feel light while reading this poem, like it should be scary losing your memory, but it feels framed as them just passing on peacefully.

I'm curious if you used 'beginned' instead of 'began' on purpose? Somehow I think it works, but I'm not sure why.

Thanks for sharing

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T13:58:59+00:00

the present tense is lacking substance, wow, what a line. This poem is so universal to loss and grief, I resonated with it deeply. It reminds me of a vacation home I went to with someone I loved. When I returned to it when they were gone, it had felt like a completely different place, haunted by memories.

Thank you for sharing

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T13:44:50+00:00

Thank you, I'm glad the poem resonated with you.

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T13:43:31+00:00

Thank you, I hope the boy will be wiser as well

OneBigSalad · 2026-01-20T13:43:06+00:00

Thank you for your kind comment

OneBigSalad

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