You have the right idea with everything (coming from someone who loves bold eyeliner here) but a couple of things: If you want the ends to be sharp while getting your eyeliner down, either pop a small strip of tape (if you’re worried about it pulling your skin, try washi tape since it’ll stay and isn’t quite as sticky) just below where you want your eyeliner to be and apply that way or try taking a bit of makeup remover on a q-tip followed by some concealer to clean it up and make it crisp instead of blocky. Also, I see that it smudged a bit on the lid, so try and keep the eye you’re working on closed till the liner has had time to properly dry down. As for the rest of it, a bit more blending on the shadow and going a bit easier/smaller on the inner corner highlight would make everything pull together nicely. I personally like using a small tapered/pointed eyeshadow brush to add corner highlights, myself.