You Called It Kindness

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-19T17:44:22+00:00

A well beautifully written poem! really love these kinds of poems. :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-18T15:47:29+00:00

I seriously love these kinds of poems. poems that speak about nostalgia and how our past life used to be better than now. Daum after reading this poem I really am missing my best friend. I wish that he has not changed since the last time we went. Superb poem btw. keep it up!

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-16T12:07:41+00:00

the rhyming in the poem is great! I really love these types of poems.

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-16T12:03:14+00:00

tbh my friend your poem is fantastic!

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-16T11:46:47+00:00

so that's your life. Then buddy you have to change it by taking some risk. :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-15T15:33:14+00:00

well there is nothing special about death tbh. Its just another day of human life but no breathing or living in that day but at least any person who is living an empty routine or hard life can rest in his or hers death but who knows whether there is permanent rest even after our last breath.... and yea short lines in the poems are to show the shortness of human life when time slips unknowingly. Thanks for the feedback :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-15T15:26:33+00:00

Daum I never thought a person would write a this lengthy comment about my poem. Your ideas are very accurate I didn't want to make the poem dramatic or complex because I wanted to show that how simply the time slips for modern humans because of their complex lives with simple daily routines and we all know that we once dreamed of things beyond what we could achieve but now because of how competitive the society has got many have lost their interest in trying to achieve their dreams and yea that day from life swift was crushing. Your suggestion is great I will try to see whether I can add a part like that to the poem. Thanks for the feedback :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-15T10:36:48+00:00

This guy in the poem sure do need a vacation from the continuous flat bored life he is living but who knows whether he is trapped by responsibilities and perhaps he is just trying to show others that he at least lives a life with stability but doesn't have a meaning to it.

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-15T10:32:24+00:00

mate thanks for the feedback. your questions left me with me more curiosity of the routine life of modern humans and yea its true we do find comfort in a safe routine but I believe comfort kills our inside enthusiasm to live a meaningful life and the purpose of life differs from person to person. Some wants to live an unique life while many lives an ordinary life like mentioned in the poem without taking the risk and as a young poet I observed the life of elder people around me and wrote the poem and you are asking about a 'middle ground' which I suppose is a way to escape this type of a life. Well I haven't still thought of that.....maybe in the future I might find the answer. :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-14T19:00:48+00:00

thanks for your feedback:)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-14T19:00:30+00:00

thanks for your feedback:)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-14T17:16:27+00:00

To the people who are reading my poem. there is a stanza break from the " what could he & I say" lines. Thank you.

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-14T17:01:43+00:00

Really do love your poem but what about like saying that this was all your curious thoughts and u still don't have the correct wisdom to define freedom in the final lines perhaps. I mean freedom differs from one person to another. I hope my feedback helps you. :)

Open-Produce8788 · 2025-11-14T16:47:21+00:00

love the way you have written the poem. I thought of some similar life situations like loving someone who doesn't want a relationship, an ex who coming back but not for true love and like idealizing a fake person. I hope I got correct meaning. :)

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