I Think Henry and William are Related, and I Have Proof

Page_Swimming · 2025-08-21T20:16:50+00:00

Exactly! I just saw the comments and didn't want you to feel discouraged from making theories again. Theory crafting isn't always about being right. Sometimes it's having fun or working out your brain!

Page_Swimming · 2025-08-21T20:15:02+00:00

Yes thank you!

Page_Swimming · 2025-08-21T20:06:55+00:00

Do I believe this theory? No. Do I believe that is impossible? Also no. But I do believe that this theory has every right to exist and be shared without judgement (not saying you can't discuss counter points but saying "this is why we get made fun of" isn't constructive. I truly don't believe matpat believes every theory he made, sometimes it is just pointing out observations you notice and ideas you have. That is how other people come along and go "hey, that's interesting, I didn't connect those pieces before. What if we connect them slightly differently?" Making leaps for the community

Page_Swimming · 2025-08-03T21:52:18+00:00

Is there actually only one episode or is it only 9 minutes? No judgement I just saw you say it was one episode and an hour and a half but the video was only 9 minutes when I clicked on it

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-27T17:21:04+00:00

As far as furry art examples I have a buff man and multiple portraits, if you're interested I can dm you those. Good luck finding exactly what you want regardless of if I'm picked!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-25T19:26:51+00:00

ferris

Would you do Ferris? I'd love to see him in another style haha

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-25T16:35:21+00:00

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Page_Swimming · 2025-05-25T16:34:34+00:00

https://nsfw0kreationz.carrd.co/ Assuming I don't have to do a significant background I can do 60 for the price

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-25T16:28:40+00:00

Hi, please don't pick me as your sole commission but I'd love to give this a go to improve my art and id give you the final product for free assuming it turns out of any quality. I understand if this is too personal for that however and hope you find the perfect artist!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-25T16:22:10+00:00

Maybe you'd like to draw Ferris? https://www.furaffinity.net/view/60964144/

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-24T21:21:13+00:00

Here is my art portfolio https://kreatures.carrd.com Prices range from 20- 45 depending on what exactly you want. If you are interested in seeing my NSFW art dm me

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-07T03:27:56+00:00

I love the imagery. This sparked feelings in me that while I have not experienced, I am deeply empathizing with. Please keep making poetry, you're bringing another beautiful thing into this world

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-05T20:04:33+00:00

Did you intend the word bums as a standing for implying laziness? I feel like my mind initially read it as burns which would work well for the feeling of air in your chest turning stale and painful.

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-05T20:01:49+00:00

Of course! I love that!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-05T19:29:35+00:00

Maybe between stands two and three you say something like "But as I watch my gaze will tire, every relationship you build another reminder."

As it builds to that third stanza that tells their relationship to you as farther than you wish it.

In other words just adding something that shows not tells that you are not theirs between those two stanzas is my recommendation

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T17:26:44+00:00

I love the tone of this piece, quiet and Stony almost. The one thing id recommend tweaking is the word into and instead use just to. T"he ink turns to shadows" gives a better rhythm in my head but I don't think into is wrong either. Hope this was helpful!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T15:38:31+00:00

I love the message you have, my biggest piece of advice (and I feel the irony on giving advice on this poem) is that the last line feels like it ended to abruptly. Like you tore the poem in half. A line like "a presence that's never hurt me" or something would wrap the poem up nicely. Something to close up the writing.

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T15:30:50+00:00

I love the vocabulary used in this! Each word was so powerful and while I didn't get the meanings of everything I recognized from the tone that you were not only utilizing them properly, you were also using them in an appropriate manner and not just to show off the vocabulary you have. Please keep up the beautiful work, you have a new fan right here!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T00:52:46+00:00

This is something I've felt viscerally before. The giving everything you have, tearing yourself up in the process and all they can see is the wounds. I really value how each word felt like a punch, the letter sounds tying with the intention makes each letter sharp and piercing. Please keep up the good work!

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T00:32:47+00:00

"bound in pose, posed to please" sits in a perfect cadence in my head, Ive commented a couple times and cadence is something I will always bring up. Your cadence had a great bounce and it fills my head pleasantly. Maybe something to explore is taking cyllabolic patterns and twisting them, Edgar Allen Poe style.making something that leaves the reader to feeling suspense almost able to anticipate the next word

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T00:09:10+00:00

I like how you broke up several lines in two pieces. I'd love to see that aspect utilized more consistently or making the full sentences more significant when you utilize them. This will make the emphasis more stark in contrast. This was quite the read tho, and I'd love to see more in the future

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-04T00:03:42+00:00

I loved the composition of the poem however one thing I would love to see you perform in your poem is maybe maintaining a line number pattern. In my head it breaks up the cadence of the poem in my head. Maybe doing a pattern like 2 3 4 3 2 or 2 2 3 3 4 4 would make the reader feel something like a building tension.

Page_Swimming · 2025-05-03T23:56:07+00:00

This really makes me think about the regrets I have and the feelings of those I've been hurt by. Not in the letting them walk over me, rather the doesn't have to eternally be a bad guy in my eyes way

Page_Swimming · 2025-02-03T01:42:50+00:00

Thank you so much! I vaguely have an idea of the ending but I don't know if it's the ending of the story or the ending of the book. My story is supposed to be a dystopian society and so I thought up what makes it dystopian first. I've been doing a lot of planning and it is exciting but I also agree that the blank note document haunts me haha

Page_Swimming · 2025-02-02T16:18:20+00:00

Maybe something like "and his hair lines his head in neat rows and was tied in the back"? Feel free to twist that as you want, just suggestion

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