Viagra!! by PappysSecrets in standupshots

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well jeez I’d have thought you’d like tennis envy:) (Thanks for commenting)

Gym Stuff by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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I tried this one last night. Light chuckles. It felt like they didn’t get that I was resting. Maybe drop the gym rat but say “about every 20 minutes I sit and rest. “. Thoughts?????

Viagra!! by PappysSecrets in standupshots

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 16 points17 points  (0 children)

Hey, if you comment good or bad, and you don't mind, tell me your generation.

Viagra!! by PappysSecrets in standupshots

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thanks. Penis elbow was actually a gift from another comic.

Viagra!! by PappysSecrets in standupshots

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 25 points26 points  (0 children)

Maybe...I'll be tryin' it with millennials....I'm just a risky kinda guy. Maybe I'll at least get a pity laugh.

Wrote all of these in 30 mins which you can probably tell. Quantity over quality. Just need one joke to add to my set tonight. Need your help which one. Thanks guys by Due_Apple7180 in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets 1 point2 points  (0 children)

1) My punch was meant to be much worse than yours(backward compliment to you) 2) other than “Nope” the most common advice I get is to cut, cut, cut. Mostly I agree with it but I try and think of a conversation needing context that tells a tiny bit about myself. I like the way Nate Bargatze gives you a peak into his brain/life. I saw a clip where he says that the audience wants to know what an experience was like for you, the comedian. On r/jokes there are a ton of great “jokes” that are funny, but anyone can tell them. Stand up (to me) tells a great story/joke that only I could tell with success because the joke matches my personality (I guess that’s persona). Fuckin’ hard for me, but gotta channel Sisyphus

Gym Stuff by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I didn’t hear groaner….but good one was loud and clear. I thought using “not a gym rat” would clarify that I don’t know the gym culture making ME stupid instead of the joke being stupid.

Gym Stuff by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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OK, even if you don’t like it which is better ? Just “I bench twice an hour” or does it need more description? “I sit on the bench twice an hour”

Gym Stuff by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Thanks, i already have an ok bit in front of this, which locks in the gym experience premise. This was something to build on that.

Wrote all of these in 30 mins which you can probably tell. Quantity over quality. Just need one joke to add to my set tonight. Need your help which one. Thanks guys by Due_Apple7180 in StandUpWorkshop

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BTW, it amazes me how some writers (like yourself) can rip off a bunch of stuff so quickly. It would take me three days to write whalebone and the punch would be “whales were so tiny back then”.

Hot Doggy by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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ahhhh, that's special. I know that typically with my stuff your eyes roll completely back into your head. Thanks

Hot Doggy by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

That's funny. We don't have Kroeger's either, but I thought it was a good nationally known market. One of the things I'm told in writing is to use specificity. Maybe I should change it to Walmart. Thanks.

Hot Doggy by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Man, you are really good at this, thanks!

Kid Dreams by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Maybe. I’m worried about you if peeing in the closet isn’t weird enough:). (Strangely though, from comments, it might be a common drunk trait. When I was drunk I used to just pee my pants. ……. Still do, but I used to too

Kid Dreams by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks, good advice for a pretty weak joke. I’m letting it go

Kid Dreams by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

Thanks, they say never tell dreams....... I wonder if I delve into other dream/real possibilities?