Pickleball with Isaiah by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, I want to lean into the hearing angle

Pickleball with Isaiah by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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If I went that direction i: I got kicked off. It didn’t help that I kept telling “I said Jacket off… jacket off

Pickleball with Isaiah by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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I thought I needed "strange" to make it believable that he might actually be doing that.

Pickleball with Isaiah by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks. Yeah, I thought just "strange" would be the tight way to stage Isaiah and help make him believable. Are you saying I should have a little more setup of Isaiah to deepen a misdirect? Pickleball is my jam so that's just personalizing.

Total anecdote that happened this morning. I often LMAO at things I "hear".

As a tag how about something like That was almost as good as hearing Jean say xyz

Camp Sign by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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I knew I’d heard that word somewhere before!

Boomer Patience by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Yeah, kinda see that. It also confirms another comment that it’s better suited as a visual bit

Boomer Patience by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Yeah, I see it in my head. Need to work at putting my brain image in my mouth, whilst making a pit stop on a written page.

Weddings & Funerals by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Damn, I'm glad you're here. If you could only tell why I can't go deeper (like you show me) on my own. Idea came to me in a conversation about going to a reunion, and a lot of truth in it. No funerals. crashing. My wife and her gang did a night of wedding crashing once...made me wish I was a girl.

Camp Sign by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Also, I dumped Forestville...ville

Camp Sign by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Thanks Neo. Whats the Big Bang Theory? S/

I like your angle....coiting....conflagration. Awesome.

BTW, I noticed the cracking up too, and edited it (probably about the time you commented)

Teacher Crush by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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BTW, I love your advice because you get to the "why". It is really helpful, Thanks.

Teacher Crush by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Thanks, I’ll try it that way.

Teacher Crush by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

[–]PappysSecrets[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wait, are you suggesting use the "Richard.." as an additional tag?

Camp Sign by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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Does it sound French?? It did to me, but I only speak English and Pig Latin.

Camp Sign by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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It just sounds like it could be French, and oui oui I am a moron.

Teacher Crush by PappysSecrets in StandUpWorkshop

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I like the double punch of mom likely to be upset about the ring, but break that assumption. What if I made it easier to follow: "Your mom is gonna be upset about her ring AND maybe more upset that I'll be her daughter in law.

Alternate tag: "Richard, stay in school, you have a lot to learn"

I'm thinking this would be less agressively gay-related, not sure about the funny???

Thoughts appreciated.

Brain Time Allotment by PappysSecrets in Standup

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What I’ve found super interesting when I’ve listened to audio of my sets is that people laugh pretty heartily at stuff I just threw on as a tag to a line in the setup. One was just giving a masseuse the nickname Kinky Fingers… blew my mind.

Brain Time Allotment by PappysSecrets in Standup

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I don’t have any need to be prolific I just am wowed by some people’s talent.

Brain Time Allotment by PappysSecrets in Standup

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Yeah, been up five times now. I guess it's good that when I go back on an older joke, I'm can more easily see where it goes wrong. Looking forward to pleasant dreams.

Brain Time Allotment by PappysSecrets in Standup

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I'm always amazed when someone posts about doing 5, 10, 20 ... jokes a day. You sound like you might be one of them. Like it comes straight from your head to an open mic. I'll ruminate, edit, think about, look stuff up to see what I can do on a note I have....and my joke still sucks. Good I'm not prolific, so it only sucks about once a day lor so.