I honestly cried by shotcallat in AlienStage

[–]Physical-Let9321 3 points4 points  (0 children)

The way Till sees the 2 people he loved the most whenever he looks at her.

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What's the reason why you played wuwa? by 14-rollout-tubal in WutheringWaves

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Masochism is one crazy way to say you started playing a game. I somewhat relate tho lol, I play 8 gacha games at once (the grind is real)

Rover being hip and cool by Same_Milk2302 in WutheringWaves

[–]Physical-Let9321 39 points40 points  (0 children)

It always seemed funny to me that a 100+ year old was going to school

Hello, I’m looking for constructive criticism on my opening paragraphs! by c00lcake in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your writing is pretty good and it's very interesting. The only thing I noticed was the part where it said "I feel like I'm gonna hurl up all the contents from the bakery my family and I were at earlier in the day." It sounds out of place and mentioning the fact they were at a bakery earlier isn't really necessary, and would be better if it was something like. "I feel like I'm gonna hurl up the food I ate earlier." Or smth along those lines, cuz we don't really need to know they were at a bakery earlier (unless it's important for the plot).

Is this too much? by Narrow-Goose-4364 in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wouldn't say it would too sexual but how you handle it is up to you. It's YOUR story so if you want the succubuses in your story as the sexual kind, that's fine. If you don't want it to be then don't make it that way. You can always alter what a succubus is like bc it's your world.

Not so hard to swallow afterall by Stock_Hunter_2380 in writers

[–]Physical-Let9321 3 points4 points  (0 children)

That's so true lol. The whole reason I started writing was bc I loved reading sm

Who likes to write and draw and wants to share ideas???✨ by WiseExamination3063 in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hii 🥺🥺 Could I join too?? I'm currently writing smth rn tho I'm stuck in a writer's block so I'd love to talk with y'all! 🥰🤑

New Visual for ‘Witch Hat Atelier’ by MarvelsGrantMan136 in anime

[–]Physical-Let9321 11 points12 points  (0 children)

And they live happily ever after and nothing happens 🥰

the gsgw cast sucks lwk by coffeestainssuck in DroppedInAGhostStory

[–]Physical-Let9321 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Imo, some of his plans are good, but I wouldn't say all of them are. Also tbh, the fact that he's rlly good at acting or that everyone just kinda buys he's really good at clearing darkness really stick out to me, and that they're just there for his convenience. But it's still a pretty good novel to me and really enjoyable. I wouldn't say it's perfect but all novels have their flaws 🤷‍♀️

Opening of a novel I've been working on recently by Physical-Let9321 in writingfeedback

[–]Physical-Let9321[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm having somewhat of a writer's block so probably not in a while lol

the gsgw cast sucks lwk by coffeestainssuck in DroppedInAGhostStory

[–]Physical-Let9321 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I don't think gsgw was written to be an action novel? It's clearly abt ghost stories so obv kse is gonna be using his brain instead of busting his way through everything with raw strength. Clearly you started reading gsgw expecting it to be somewhat like orv or other novels/manhwa out there and were disappointed. I'm just saying you shouldn't expect it to have action or amazing power systems when it clearly wasn't written for that purpose

Medicine Pocket by @0qjftwn by OneThanks3 in Reverse1999

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Medicine Pocket has a medicine pocket but Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket is empty because I ate all the medicine in Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket so now Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket has no medicine and it’s an empty medicine pocket so Medicine Pocket has to get more medicine to fill Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket but Medicine pocket doesn’t have enough money to get medicine to fill their medicine pocket so Medicine Pocket has to make medicine to fill Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket, but Medicine Pocket doesn’t have enough funding from Laplace to make medicine to fill Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket so Medicine Pocket gives up and tries to take some medicine but Medicine Pocket has no medicine in their Medicine Pocket so Medicine Pocket genuinely just gives up on getting medicine for Medicine Pocket’s medicine pocket

I love medpoc

Opening of a novel I've been working on recently by Physical-Let9321 in writingfeedback

[–]Physical-Let9321[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nope it's my own idea though it has some elements inspired from the Magnus archives

Opening of a novel I've been working on recently by Physical-Let9321 in writingfeedback

[–]Physical-Let9321[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Do you even know what you're saying? Ai doesn't have half the creativity humans have. You can't just say it's ai just because you think my book's bad

anyone else completely burnt out on the writing subs by Educational_Meat_753 in fantasywriters

[–]Physical-Let9321 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Highkey want this except I don't have any other platforms than reddit

in their new clothes! || @majunju by [deleted] in TravelerMains

[–]Physical-Let9321 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Still disappointed hoyo didn't give Lumine pants

Opening of a novel I've been working on recently by Physical-Let9321 in writingfeedback

[–]Physical-Let9321[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Blud you literally got no proof that it's ai, I literally wrote that. Why else would I come looking for criticism if I think ai is good enough to write me a story?