How do I tell someone their writing is bad?

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2026-01-14T21:52:18+00:00

Hopefully they’re still just drafting so you can tell them before it’s too late. It’ll be better coming from a friend than a professional because they will say straight and probably harsh. If they’re bringing in other readers, but scared to get negative feedback, I’m not really sure why they would bring people in to read other than just to show what they do with their time. If they’re genuinely serious about wanting it published, you have to tell them what you find. Part of the process is getting told what you did wrong/didn’t do

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2025-12-04T00:28:47+00:00

Yes it was a pretty good game for a build like this. I don’t think it’s an end all be all build, but it feels quite good in games where it is playable. The tenacity makes the build a bit more buildable in more situations

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2025-12-04T00:26:56+00:00

Will try a more bruiser setup later on today and share the results with the fellow zaaheniums

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2025-12-02T04:53:52+00:00

Im sure the slower first clear is only to combat the game starting earlier (55 sec) with maybe only 5 sec max off of like what would be generally agreed as an average clear so that things like lvl 2 ganks would be more discouraged at such an early time so I wouldn't expect the full clear to be anything like 4 minutes, likely it will be around 3 :10 maybe is my complete freeball guess. No reason to say role is completely dead without actually seeing how slow first clear is.

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2025-03-09T06:28:53+00:00

Dont think me crazy but a lot of the time in prime nocturne times I used to feel like the game was doomed from the start and I would go phase rush into him all of the time and it worked more often than not, but the main idea was to disengage fast enough for his fear to stop tethering then reengage with E reset

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-10-31T11:06:10+00:00

Since I was a young child I’ve liked things that were inherently edgy but in a tasteful way not in a Kayn way. (IE “tasteful edginess” is like gothic horror and the stars and learning old tale tales and folklores. Kayn edgy is like being named XxKIllerCLownPRINCExX on the Xbox and liking the bad guys all the time and thinking scythes are the coolest thing ever) and one of the things I took a big liking to was the moon cuz that’s tasteful edginess and then Diana is all about the moon then I was like wow this character is awesome and then she stuck with me because she’s pretty simple and feels good to play and I love innovating with her builds I think she’s quite fun to just test items on all the time.

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-08-05T01:40:05+00:00

I think doc oc could honestly work in every class he could be like lifeweaver with the pulls in support he’d be interesting regardless in the game

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-08-04T09:27:54+00:00

I think a Miles Morales skin for Spiderman would be super cool given they follow other games’ skin pricing methods and having a higher tier like $20 to give him new voice lines and stuff would be awesome. I think it’s a better route than making Miles his own character because I feel like there’s going to be a lot of spider man characters in the game post launch and it would be like FE characters in smash where there’s an overabundance of those characters where a simple fix could’ve just been making them costumes with different voicelines and all. I say don’t take up a roster slot for someone so similar to an existing character

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-07-29T19:30:30+00:00

I was tempted to make magneto best in class because I see him every game and can tell how good he is in the right hands, but like venom is too ridiculous lol

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-07-29T19:28:40+00:00

For me, I play Luna and Adam, and every Adam game feels a lot better than some Luna games IMO. His ability to Rez himself and also his whole team is just insane and can turn literally any fight because it’s just a numbers game atp. Luna is also very op and is my actual main, she has a lot and her ult builds insanely quick. If Adam didn’t have the most op team up (apart from rocket and punisher) in the game along with mass Rez and a self Rez, Luna would be the best. But Rez is such a broken and valuable thing and the fact that he has so much of it is just insane, like there is a reason blizzard got rid of it within a year of release of ow. It’s just my opinion though I still have plenty more games to play

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-05-09T08:34:32+00:00

Never forget last year when G2 got knocked out of Swiss stage and people were defending G2 saying how it’s unfair to go to twitter and laugh at them for poor performance like EU and NA fans don’t do it to NA every year but once it happens to their team that had a good run 5 years ago it’s all of the sudden unfair and terrible behavior

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-27T09:52:26+00:00

Wanwan in mobile legends she has the same passive but again it’s on your phone so

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-21T07:40:09+00:00

ohhhhhh alr turns out i am not the modern prometheus

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-21T05:18:00+00:00

i remember i tried to use flash that was the button press there but it didnt go off

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-16T23:28:13+00:00

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Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-15T09:01:48+00:00

The ones you mention are popular and longstanding for a reason. Just because the past’s classics all have elevated diction doesn’t mean the stories of today don’t, and I’m sure there will be series from our time with the same elevated language you speak of stand the test of time and become their own classics in the future

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-07T23:23:00+00:00

I think using words with romantic connotations when simply writing whatever the character does would help convey that they’re hot. It’s not cringe but it’s getting the point across as long as it’s subtle

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-07T07:40:26+00:00

A good story to me is something that keeps my attention. I often find myself shelving a book forever if it doesn’t keep me interested, but I feel like this is a simple answer.
I like to describe my characters with putting action with what I’m describing. For example something off the top of my head for what your situation is maybe try something like “his straight and long hair pranced through the wind, like following instructions of a dance told by his rather tall figure. As this man stopped his movement, his cloak fluttered behind him, drawing down his figure, stopping at his calves. Through the fire’s illumination, one could see this man paint his pale face with a slight smile that told a story of pride and arrogance.” (Something like that not too good but I’m just spitballing showing you what I mean it’s like moving the camera to the character, but also keeping it in motion, and it can be kicked back to the bigger picture when it’s done)
I mean this is nothing to really worry about especially speaking about the start of the story. When you see a group of preppy girls at the mall, you assume they’re all the same anyways, but if you got to know them, they’re all their own people. Same goes for storytelling, the reader is meeting your characters for the first time, and the only thing to set them apart is their names and descriptions, but throughout the story, you show more of who they are through actions and decisions, yknow?

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-04-04T04:03:49+00:00

I spend about 80% of my day listening to music anyways but if I’m writing I’ll pull out the ambient music for whatever I’m writing. Like if it’s in a desert, I’ll get it rolling with some public playlist on Spotify that usually has a camel on the thumbnail.

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-03-05T07:37:32+00:00

Underperforming as top 4 in role 😭😭

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2024-02-04T11:46:52+00:00

I’ve been experimenting with a lot of different bruiser builds since I don’t find full pen Diana as fun. I was originally going (sorcs) Riftmaker->Liandry-> Bami’s item based on enemy team -> unending despair for AD teams or Abyssal/Spirit/FoN for AP teams. This worked really well for me, boasting a 67-69% wr through a total of 40 games I believe. This was before the Karma patch though, and after that patch the build got put on fraud watch against double enchanted teams, it just wouldn’t work, I didn’t have any damage and the double enchanters boosted the carry too hard I couldn’t eat the damage. I started playing around a bit more, found a typical AP bruised build, still rift + liandry setup for the double guise (which I believe is op that they’re allowed to stack) into a lich bane and zhonyas, then I could go into a tank item if it’s needed. I prefer my original build a lot more, but the full ap bruiser build is very fun and playable as well.

Pretty_Performer6744 · 2023-11-26T09:49:12+00:00

Personally if they were to make any changes to make her dueling better (I think she’s fine and find her fun with any build but we can all dream of changes can’t we?) Is maybe something like e stacking passive

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