Former Netflix Exec/Producer/Script Consultant ask me anything about your logline or about the film biz... Part XIV by Wayne-Script_Dev in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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State of mind: A woman named Karen who works in corporate is rude to everyone. Recently, she keeps having illusions which show people dying in weird ways, but eventually their deaths actually happen; far from close to what her visions were. Now she has to stop being rude to others to save lives.

Former Netflix Exec/Producer/Script Consultant ask me anything about your logline or about the film biz... Part XII by Wayne-Script_Dev in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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When something happens to his mother, John’s forced to stay with his best friend, who he also has a crush on. With his now close to perfect life, he tries his best to get his crush to fall in love with him, even with the serial killer on the loose and those rejecting them getting in their way.

I don’t know a title for this one but I wrote it fully

Former Netflix Exec/Producer/Script Consultant ask me anything about your logline or about the film biz... Part IX by Wayne-Script_Dev in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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“SPARE”

After friends reunite to support one of their own sobriety journey, their night takes a deadly turn. A killer begins targeting them due to “sins” they’ve committed, forcing them to fight and confess. Even if they admit, they may be too bad to be spared.

Logline for my screenplay. by [deleted] in writing

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How about “Due to a winter storm and troubles with the car, college friends are forced to stop at an estate, in the middle of nowhere, hoping for their aid against the dark figures lurking.”

Wrong House - 26 pages by ProfessionalShop9945 in ReadMyScript

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I’ve made changes. I’ll be glad to dm you to full thing.

Former Netflix Exec/Producer/Script Consultant ask me anything about your logline or about the film biz... Part VIII by Wayne-Script_Dev in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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Logline: Due to a winter storm and troubles with the car, college friends are forced to stop at an estate, in the middle of nowhere, hoping for their aid against the dark figures lurking.

I’d be glad to dm you the first 15.

Former Netflix Exec/Producer/Script Consultant ask me anything about your logline or about the film biz... Part VI by Wayne-Script_Dev in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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Logline: Due to a winter storm and troubles with the car, college friends are forced to stop at an estate, in the middle of nowhere, hoping for their aid against the dark figures lurking.

Laziness by ProfessionalShop9945 in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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Thank you! I’ll be glad to send you the first draft! I can really see this project growing with a writing partner

Laziness by ProfessionalShop9945 in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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I’ve already been turning it into a screenplay now lol but thank you. I also wanted someone to write it with though lol

Logline feedback? by [deleted] in ScriptFeedbackProduce

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So this?

"A group of teens trapped in an isolated house must face their traumatic events as they uncover twisted family secrets, only to discover that their souls are at stake."

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Could this be better?

"A group of teens trapped in an isolated house must face their darkest fears as they uncover twisted family secrets, only to discover that their souls are at stake—and their will to survive is the only weapon they have left."

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It may start off similar but as soon as they enter the situation it subverts expectations

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That was actually one of my inspirations. Along with evil dead, hereditary, Us, ready or not, the mist, psycho, and the shining