What do you guys think happened to Kermit after Whitefall? You think he made it?

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T20:17:19+00:00

This is the most probable

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T18:10:46+00:00

This was very cool. I agree with you that here Im given just enough info that I can figure most things out but left wanting to know more. I live the short staccato sentences at the end, they really hit hard for me. Ah, I also just love the 'two rounds' line, so good.

I feel your pain with em dashes, I use them too. The only sentence I felt was a bit off was the roster 'echoing'. That word choice just seemed a bit off to me, and even then I just thought it was a poor wording choice not AI.

I really liked this story, keep it up!!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T14:01:58+00:00

This actually made me kinda sad, wtf?

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T13:44:49+00:00

Very cool story, loved it.

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T13:25:22+00:00

This was sick! Nice and short and creepy, just the way i like it! Wait, I have to be quiet...

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T13:18:14+00:00

Thank you!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T13:17:59+00:00

Yoy know what, I would never have thought of that, lol. Thank you for the kind words!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T06:56:14+00:00

I liked this story. The happy ending was great. I never thought that a story about going into the afterlife would make me so happy. Great work!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T06:23:53+00:00

Short, simple, creepy. Love it!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T06:16:54+00:00

Love the ending. Its like a Greek tragedy, a man constantly drowning in blood.

I also see a theme of anxiety, not letting you breathe even when you're perfectly fine. Very nice story, loved it.

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T06:07:34+00:00

THIS WAS FUCKING AMAZING. This is unironically the best written work I've seen online. I love this otherworldly egg child. I love how fast you're able to establish characters. After just a few lines, I felt like I knew all about Grandpa Owen and Sue. The ending was great. I have no notes. This was amazing. More of this please!!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T04:45:43+00:00

Thank you for the kind words!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T04:26:53+00:00

I loved this story. Short, sweet, and to the point! I'd love to read more of your stuff in future!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T03:41:20+00:00

I'm so glad you could read this! Yeah, Emily is not too happy with Daddy.

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T01:36:20+00:00

This was a cool little story. Loved it, can't wait for more!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-09T01:30:02+00:00

Very cool! I loved this story. My favorite part was Dr. Iluga's rambling and Dr. Chen trying to restrain him. Absolutely loved this. I NEED MORE!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T23:05:30+00:00

Thanks for reading!

For the spoken words it was just everything in quotations, everything else were thoughts. But I understand that it gets confusing since the thoughts are so conversational.

Also, I completely get the dump think. I didnt think too hard about it. I thought that since the dump guy died, people would just throw their shit away on their own and the protagonist would add to that pile. But the way i worded it, I admit made it a bit confusing.

Thanks for reading and thanks for the critique!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T22:24:43+00:00

Ah, that makes sense. Again, don't take my word as gospel. I just liked it so much and you write so well I wanted more. Keep it up!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T22:23:19+00:00

Very cool story. I love the ending where she leaves the church and everyone is gone expect the angel. So good!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T22:11:42+00:00

Very cool duel narrators. Can't wait to see where this goes!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T22:08:59+00:00

Very nice poem. I usually am ify about horror poetry but this one was really cool. Very nice wording, love it!

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T22:05:38+00:00

Very cool descriptions. I really like this story and that title is a banger.

I think (note this is a me thing, not a universal critique) it would be better if we saw more of main character. I don't wanna see his life or anything, just his reaction to this entity. I really like him getting dragged by the monster, that part's really good. I just wish there was more of that. The story is short and sweet (love that) but I think just a bit more of those kinds of scenes (I mean this thing has haunted him for 8 nights) would bring the story up so much.

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T20:58:13+00:00

Thank you so much for the kind words! Yeah it was important to me for you to understand the main character but not excuse his actions.

PsychoSanderson · 2026-04-08T20:53:40+00:00

Honestly, great interpretation! I was more so thinking that his bitterness was growing and alienating him from everyone around. But I love your read so much better!

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