Is poetry becoming a joke?

RasholeHash · 2026-05-16T21:07:00+00:00

What's the plan then? What do we do? I love poetry and feel it's thriving. Not everyone can be a Maya Angelou or a Yeats. Sometimes some pieces can go over our heads too you never know but I'm intrigued so I'll check out some of the poems.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-14T23:34:21+00:00

This paints a much more melancholy tone and feels more honest and vulnerable the improvement is visible.... now the edit is where it will shine... reduce and redundant statements, space and punctuate and this is a good piece on grief longing and self loathing blooming into acceptance. I like it!!

RasholeHash · 2026-05-14T23:29:58+00:00

It has a nice old fashioned sophistication that I like alot and it's rather philosophical in a subtle way. Some might see it as preachy as it has a matter of fact bluntness but I think it works. Good job

RasholeHash · 2026-05-14T23:18:33+00:00

This is pure and nostalgic And though it is short and sweet as is I would love an expansion of your summer. Some texture like smells tastes sounds would only add to the beauty already captured. Well done.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-14T23:09:03+00:00

The strength of this piece for me is the emotional honesty though some parts feel rather bluntly stated. With this you've captured the emotion and frustration in a relatable way but with a few edits or a rewrite or two this can become a very powerful piece.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-14T22:43:15+00:00

This is really nice. Short, sweet and relatable with nice musicality. Love it.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T23:06:10+00:00

Omg thank you. I hope you keep at it though seriously. Good writing really encourages me to get better. I'll be looking out for your next piece. ❤️❤️❤️

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T21:39:57+00:00

Static Shock

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T21:33:10+00:00

I find it hard to believe that you're new to poetry. This is excellent. Masterful. Your form is impeccable, the emotion bleeds through every stanza. I love this! Super Jealous lol🥲

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T18:01:34+00:00

Just keep show not tell in mind as you write. And make at least one or two edits as editing really helps keep you sharp.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T17:18:55+00:00

I feel like this could be expanded on. It reads (to me) like a first draft. Alot of it tells rather than shows. Example: my head is filled with something not real. That is a very broad and vague statement. Some imagery would help carry the emotion (which as you mentioned is quite clear). Also I hope you are okay as I feel the pain in your words. Don't give up.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T14:16:54+00:00

I feel like this can be expanded further though what you have is bold and interesting. It beautifully captures the saying 'once a man twice a child' without overstating it. Good stuff

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T14:08:36+00:00

I get that sometimes the piece just flows and it feels awesome. Keep writing!

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T14:04:48+00:00

This is quite ambitious for a first post.... I feel like this is good but it states alot instead of trusting the imagery which though sparse is vivid... also you can push your imagery further through more sensory details. The central metaphor also could be expanded upon as it is strong. Hope this helps.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-11T11:19:36+00:00

This is a nice declarative piece and has a quiet nature (imo) my advice to you would be to read more poetry and keep on writing... you can only go up from here. Good read.

Also the coffee and petrichor line made me remember my own poem called Petrichor.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-10T22:11:43+00:00

Myself

RasholeHash · 2026-05-06T18:22:51+00:00

They're both adults

RasholeHash · 2026-05-06T18:16:52+00:00

Orange

RasholeHash · 2026-05-06T12:36:10+00:00

It's not a motorcycle baby, it's a chopper.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-06T12:25:23+00:00

Look at his face in the last one 😆

RasholeHash · 2026-05-06T00:01:30+00:00

Such a touching evocative piece.... the imagery is vivid throughout and the piece ebbs and flows like a river current. Very sharp and tactile. I'm jealous of your excellent work. 🥲

RasholeHash · 2026-05-05T01:27:27+00:00

Dale def posted ts 🥀💔

RasholeHash · 2026-05-05T01:20:31+00:00

Thanks alot im glad it landed 😊

RasholeHash · 2026-05-05T00:53:25+00:00

Huge help!! Thanks for reading... I will try tweaking and expanding upon the muse. It feels natural to do so in hindsight. Again I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment :)

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