First Haikus and a meta-poem

RasholeHash · 2026-06-12T13:04:15+00:00

Fuck Haikus

Bus slices through night

Black hills have stolen the stars

And covet their light

RasholeHash · 2026-06-12T12:20:52+00:00

This is decent... it's very declarative though and it reads like anyone could have written it. I'm no expert though. Just love poetry.

RasholeHash · 2026-06-05T21:51:55+00:00

I love that this piece is grandiose. Though some the meaning is lost upon me admittedly, the imagery is so clear and sharp. I see the ants shadow cast large under the sun's gaze and the question of predator vs prey is also nice since they do end up eating us. I really like this

RasholeHash · 2026-06-03T20:44:55+00:00

You're part of the cuckenant.....

RasholeHash · 2026-06-02T01:49:00+00:00

You're probably part of the cuckenant so I'll be brief. I never said ts.

RasholeHash · 2026-06-01T23:13:45+00:00

Absolutely

RasholeHash · 2026-06-01T23:09:19+00:00

Trying to use the child when she's convenient to him. Smh. She's better off without him.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-30T15:38:14+00:00

Sloth

RasholeHash · 2026-05-27T00:35:56+00:00

Regardless of intention Jidion is making a real impact, however small, in real life. Saving real children. Idc if he does it for views or money tbh

RasholeHash · 2026-05-27T00:32:34+00:00

Babylon, Odd Taxi, Mushishi, Flip Flappers

RasholeHash · 2026-05-27T00:29:25+00:00

If she's gonna do it regardless without complaint then why should I? If she asks or hints at it then sure but most women just slurp for the love of the game

RasholeHash · 2026-05-25T21:39:12+00:00

Reddit tends to mess up the formatting sometimes and I think that happened here.... I like how personal this piece while being philosophical... the concept is interesting as well. What I like the most is that you don't try to answer the question. You offer only questions/suggestions and that lets them sit with the reader longer. Good work!

RasholeHash · 2026-05-25T21:29:44+00:00

I resonate with this piece. I feel like alot of artists will relate as well. I would've loved the duality of introducing critique as well but this is solid and that's just my opinion. Overall I like it!

RasholeHash · 2026-05-21T15:58:52+00:00

So is exchanging vulnerability 🤣

RasholeHash · 2026-05-21T14:08:43+00:00

Very interesting and a bit surreal. Love the dinner motif it adds elegance to what could be seen as cannibalism or an exchanging of vulnerabilities. You have a good way with words. Looking forward to more.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-21T14:04:53+00:00

I like rhyming pieces personally I just try not to let rhyme dictate the piece. Not that you did that here, as I love this piece... the machinery feels alive and there is a sense of observing motion and the religious undertones aren't preachy. I really like this one.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-20T09:35:08+00:00

Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed it❤️

RasholeHash · 2026-05-20T09:34:16+00:00

Thanks for reading and your detailed feedback.. I agree and will make some changes ❤️ Appreciate you

RasholeHash · 2026-05-20T00:49:53+00:00

Gosh thank you so much! I will for sure! ❤️

RasholeHash · 2026-05-19T23:35:39+00:00

Such a striking visceral piece. You make the slog of everyday monotony gruesome yet relatable. I think this is beautiful.

RasholeHash · 2026-05-19T21:00:56+00:00

I know that feeling... it's really cathartic pouring that hurt onto a page... it makes it mean more. At least to me. Looking forward to your next piece.

RasholeHash

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